Is it a crime to be bored
is it a sin to lust after girlfriend
in the middle of the afternoon on friday
is it wrong as A-l on fish to get good
and drunk after the middle of a lovely day
when you are bored with the dog
the computer and 316 channels on the tv
Y'all know 8 pm is the best time to watch
and after that raid the pantry
before it's time to sink into the pillow
think of nothing
at 2 pm there is nothing
i wanna see but my woman
coming after me
or another cup of java
and to hear the 1969
speaker blaster Almost Cut My Hair
where were we? well I was twelve
and I had to cut my hair
Today it is so pretty outside
I am prepared to wait until night before
I go completely headfirst.
Copyright Nightcrawler Works 2007
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2007-05-09 15:40:55 · 7 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
All these may be wrong if they are vague and obscure:
Is it a crime to be bored
is it a sin to lust after girlfriend
in the middle of the afternoon on friday
is it wrong as A-l on fish to get good
and drunk after the middle of a lovely day
when you are bored with the dog
the computer and 316 channels on the tv
The rest sounds quite fine except no idea what you mean by:
i wanna see but my woman
coming after me
or another cup of java
and to hear the 1969
speaker blaster Almost Cut My Hair
Sounds as if you are just playing with words! Make them work for you some magic they hide. Let the words reveal the hidden pearls they echo but do not voice.
2007-05-10 00:06:58 · answer #1 · answered by ari-pup 7 · 0⤊ 1⤋
I like it because it reflects your own personal style. There are different styles of poetic genious, and I believe no one can judge your work better than yourself.
2007-05-09 22:46:42 · answer #2 · answered by Parks H 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
The modern beat is there. The pace of life and its urban
tourches illuminate your pysche.
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2007-05-13 20:38:10 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 2⤊ 0⤋
It doesn't do a huge amount for me but, I'm a person that at times it could take a nuke to get through to me.
2007-05-09 22:50:07 · answer #4 · answered by Jesk 6 · 0⤊ 1⤋
lets get real it sux
go write a book
and read up on poetry and verse
2007-05-09 22:54:12 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
Wow. Very random.
2007-05-09 23:34:42 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
Its good, post it on poetry.com
2007-05-09 22:50:09 · answer #7 · answered by YAWN 6 · 0⤊ 1⤋