What if fairytales stopped at midnight?
Then you'd just be a thing like her
Dressed in rags
Wanderin helpless through the ghost light
Wonderin when your prince will come
Well he'll never come
Can't be a happy ending
When no one bothered with a beginning
Well fairytales weren't made for little girls like you
And it's just the truth
You were made to watch
All their happy lives from your limbo
And you'll wait and wait to be recongnized
And you'll wait for nothing
Isn't life funny?
Cinderella, Sleeping Beauty, Snow White
Spend one night suffering
Then everything is all right
But she is forever Midnight
2007-05-08 14:08:54 · 13 answers · asked by Anonymous in Society & Culture ➔ Cultures & Groups ➔ Other - Cultures & Groups
sucks.. it doesnt rhyme
2007-05-08 14:12:28 · answer #1 · answered by ? 1 · 0⤊ 3⤋
Some who answered earlier alluded to accuracy of rhyme. Disregard that.
Though it's more challenging to play tennis WITH a net, you may just as challengingly play ball withOUT that net!
See "Very like a whale" ... I believe it was Ferdinand Mound's work.
You're on the right track. Keep your heart. Keep your passion. Your vision.
You're alright. Now...only work when your feel most inspired.
qwerty
2007-05-08 23:30:33 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Forms of poetry do not have to rhyme to be called poetry. Your sample is free-prose and works well. I would suggest, however, that you concentrate on your spelling and punctuation. Otherwise, the prose is descriptive and tells a story.
2007-05-08 21:18:01 · answer #3 · answered by Guitarpicker 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Your thoughts are beautiful and show that you have a desire to experience the finer things in life. You do tend to ramble a bit and thus your poem seems a bit disjointed. However, I do think you have talent and I would encourage you to work on it.
2007-05-08 21:17:09 · answer #4 · answered by randy_plrm 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It is really good! poems dont have to rhyme. This poem sounds like it was comming frmo the heart. So yeah. I LIKE it!
2007-05-08 21:17:20 · answer #5 · answered by jazzybabe13 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think it could use some work (better flow), but its pretty decent
2007-05-08 21:15:03 · answer #6 · answered by Duck Jr. 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It is good. Nice.
2007-05-08 21:16:33 · answer #7 · answered by 2fine4u 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
(To Ralf) It does rhyme you idiot. (To poster) It's okay.
2007-05-08 21:13:17 · answer #8 · answered by Joe S. 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
not bad
2007-05-08 21:31:07 · answer #9 · answered by KT 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
very nice.
2007-05-08 21:12:44 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
i love this poem!
2007-05-08 21:47:55 · answer #11 · answered by ♥ A pirates life for me ♥ 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋