please comment on this poem i wrote
A MORTAL'S CONTENTMENT
A mortal ,
shunned by all ,
was struck upon by the unworded wrath ,
of his worshipped Goddess.
Witnessing her serene grace,
turn into the fires of hell,
left him sorrowful to his very soul.
Blessed and chosen he felt later although ,
for Instead of being ignored as dust ,
was enshrined ,
not in her hallowed heart ,
but at least momentarily in her enraged thoughts .
2007-05-05 08:11:10 · 6 answers · asked by Grateful 1 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities
Hello,
When I read the first verse, I thought I wouldn't like the poem. But as I read it through, then read the whole thing a second time, I realize it's very beautiful. I find it very sad, but the ending turns the sadness into the contentment you mention in your title without spelling it out. It makes the reader think. I believe you have been very successful with this creation, and I hope you continue to write. I believe you have genuine talent.
2007-05-05 08:18:25 · answer #1 · answered by andromedasview@sbcglobal.net 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
will you not later possibly feel bad? the poem was very good.
2007-05-05 15:22:27 · answer #2 · answered by alienmiss 5 · 0⤊ 1⤋
deep
way deep
2007-05-05 15:18:08 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
You are definitely disturbed!
2007-05-05 15:20:08 · answer #4 · answered by gyrine77 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
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2007-05-05 15:19:53 · answer #5 · answered by jon_mac_usa_007 7 · 0⤊ 1⤋
¿i don't get it?
2007-05-05 15:18:46 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 2⤊ 0⤋