everything white,
searching your heart,
between pale faces, crouded emotions,
looking for accepense,
everything white,
only your dark love,
kind haert,
open arms,
and my concious
2007-05-05 04:44:44 · 6 answers · asked by yuyu 2 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities
This is dumb, stop writing this "question".
And spell heart correctly!
2007-05-05 04:48:15 · answer #1 · answered by csucdartgirl 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
- Yes, this is how it should be with spellings corrected:
Sounds like a love poem, the speaker searching for love and wants to be accepted!! Sounds fine but spice it with more feeling. figures of speech can do the trick easily.
Everything white,
searching your heart,
between pale faces,
crowded emotions,
looking for acceptance. . . .
Everything white,
only your dark love,
kind heart,
open arms,
and my consciousness. . . .
-good luck
2007-05-05 13:15:58 · answer #2 · answered by ari-pup 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
1. Poem, mediocre.
2. Spelling, horrible.
3. Question, non-existant.
2007-05-05 12:08:36 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think the emotion and feeling in it is pretty good. But I think you should have played around with the words more. Like using different adjectives and nouns.
2007-05-05 12:53:42 · answer #4 · answered by Rima 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
And the point of this is?
2007-05-05 17:23:41 · answer #5 · answered by armyguy 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I DO NOT THINK IT IS DUMB, BUT YOU PROBABLY CAN FIND A BETTER VENUE FOR YOUR PROSE.
2007-05-05 11:56:37 · answer #6 · answered by xytus3 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋