everything white,
searching your heart,
between pale faces, crouded emotions,
looking for accepense,
everything white,
only your dark love,
kind haert,
open arms,
and my concious
2007-05-05 04:44:17 · 7 answers · asked by yuyu 2 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities
- Yes, this is how it should be with spellings corrected:
Sounds like a love poem, the speaker searching for love and wants to be accepted!! Sounds fine but spice it with more feeling. figures of speech can do the trick easily.
Everything white,
searching your heart,
between pale faces,
crowded emotions,
looking for acceptance. . . .
Everything white,
only your dark love,
kind heart,
open arms,
and my consciousness. . . .
-good luck
2007-05-05 06:13:54 · answer #1 · answered by ari-pup 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
And your question is?
If you are looking for a critique of your poem...not bad. But I would recommend using spell-check!
2007-05-05 11:53:35 · answer #2 · answered by I_hope_I_know 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I agree with the first reply
2007-05-05 11:52:10 · answer #3 · answered by malejisa 2 · 0⤊ 1⤋
wow dats gd
2007-05-05 11:48:49 · answer #4 · answered by luvin_me_4_me 5 · 0⤊ 1⤋
beautiful
2007-05-05 16:20:56 · answer #5 · answered by Basilia Harmonia 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
This is dumb, stop writing this "question".
2007-05-05 11:47:50 · answer #6 · answered by csucdartgirl 7 · 0⤊ 2⤋
deep,real deep NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOT.
2007-05-08 19:44:34 · answer #7 · answered by atlantismeditation@sbcglobal.net 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋