Pictures may fade, but memories never go away, Edward I love you more than I did yesterday.
We had our good times along with the bad, happy times and sad but always was the knowledge that the love we had would last.
You've left me on my own now and a day seems like a year but I know my darling brother I'll always have you near.
Your in my heart and in my soul your love for me will never go. All i need to do is close my eyes and your back with the living.
The hurt is still as painful and the ache is still as strong because you have gone forever my love and i have to carry on.
Bye my darling angel, the time as come to pass. I have to move on forward and put you in the past. I promise to always love you, that love will always last.
This means a lot to me pls dont ridicule me. thanks.
2007-05-04 13:14:11 · 25 answers · asked by Sazzy 2 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Philosophy
It was hard, he was only 12 but yes im getting stronger as the years pass. want it to be the best it can be.
2007-05-04 13:24:22 · update #1
thanks mudfish. thats a good idea. wrote this just after he died. just got all my old poems out.want to improve.
2007-05-04 13:28:05 · update #2
thanks izzy what a cool idea.that would be awesome if someone could put it to music or something. that would be a lovely memento.
2007-05-04 13:48:03 · update #3
If this accurately says what you were feeling when you wrote it, then there's nothing to improve! I would suggest just keeping it as is. As you get older and thoughts/feelings become more refined simply write another or more. THIS reflects who and what you were at the time.... its like a photograph! Writing more or even updating the basis of this will be be adding more snapshots to both of your lives. Best wishes.
2007-05-04 14:27:53 · answer #1 · answered by Izen G 5 · 4⤊ 0⤋
Grieving can final an entire life, quite in case you have been so on the factor of somebody. forget approximately what that guy or woman stated the day gone by! That replaced into incorrect of them. It seems such as you elect some counseling. communicate to your mom and dad and tell them the way you experience and how your brother's dying remains affecting you so severely. they might desire to get you to somebody who you could refer to and help you to style by your soreness. as quickly as you do this, it gets greater easy. You have been so youthful while it got here approximately that persons probable theory which you may recover from it immediately and it does not impression you. They have been wrong and now it's time to handle it. additionally, understand that your brother does not elect you dropping your effectual existence lacking him. He might elect you to stay your existence and be conscious of that he's high-quality. would God be with you!
2017-01-09 12:27:24 · answer #2 · answered by santacruz 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
First of all I am sorry about the news, and second of all I thought is was AWSOME! The part when you said Darling Angel I almost cried! OMG! You should write those things when you grow older! Well I am soory and I hope you live long!
2007-05-04 13:24:09 · answer #3 · answered by Shay Kak 2 · 2⤊ 0⤋
Excellent.
Writing is an art. I lost a brother and I know how you feel. Time is the only cure for the pain. One of my responses for the lost wast painting, especially in watercolors. This help me to free the pain and go ahead with my life.
2007-05-04 14:16:11 · answer #4 · answered by Lost. at. Sea. 7 · 2⤊ 0⤋
I have also written a poem about my best friend who died very young and whatever you write is true and heartfelt so no-one else can perfect it for you it is that personal keep it close and look back at it from time to time. JO X
2007-05-04 13:36:32 · answer #5 · answered by joanne a 2 · 2⤊ 0⤋
its beautiful the only part im not to sure sounds right is that first line but the rest is really good. My suggestion would be edward i love you more than words could ever say. You should get it printed onto a plaque to keep
2007-05-04 13:25:12 · answer #6 · answered by mudfish 6 · 3⤊ 0⤋
It's a lovely poem. A really nice tribute to someone you obviously loved very much. Get it printed and keep it for your own family.
2007-05-04 14:21:54 · answer #7 · answered by Marissa Di 5 · 2⤊ 0⤋
i think its from your heart to your brother,i know that he is not here but reading that was like he died yesterday it must have taken alot of guts to put this out ,you should feel proud of yourself,dont change the wording there your words not for anyone to tamper with,i hope your pain gets easier in the future
2007-05-04 13:38:46 · answer #8 · answered by Ky07 2 · 2⤊ 0⤋
Sazzy, your brother is listening and he knows now things that you don´t. He wants you to be happy. You will see him again.
In the mean time, he´d like you to know that somehow he will be with you SPECIALLY in the decisive moments in your life. He is with you now and forever.
2007-05-04 13:35:54 · answer #9 · answered by Yasam 3 · 2⤊ 0⤋
Excellent poem, full of emotion. If you're looking to be a pro (not that I am) Use more figuritive language. Again, excellent.
2007-05-04 13:19:31 · answer #10 · answered by mikezcim 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋