okay, here it is.....
Love is like a field of flowers
so many different colors
pretty and soft
they must be treated with care
or each petal will colapse to the dirt
in time they'll be in full bloom
outshining the worms and weeds
gently swaying in the warmth of the summer breeze.
2007-05-03 06:22:56 · 13 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
how long have you been writing?
The theme is a little generic, but the writing is pretty good. Needs punctuation. Poetry is not just random throwing of words, there is a science to it. It's like scientist rushing to get an experiment done without getting all the data. Ordinary people will believe it, but a scientist or a person deep into science will see the flaws.
2007-05-03 08:09:52 · answer #1 · answered by punkrock_matthew 2 · 0⤊ 1⤋
very nice. I like it. As a self poet, i really like it. where it says for each petal will collapse to the dirt, replace the word collapse with fall slowly to the ground and it'll be a little better.
2007-05-03 13:29:14 · answer #2 · answered by lovelyhorsefriend06 4 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Well, it's not bad. But the first five lines seem as if they were written by an 8 year old.
2007-05-03 13:33:29 · answer #3 · answered by sonbola 2 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Seems a little rushed. You use no punctuation so there is no break for the reader to absorb what you are saying. Slow it down and give them a chance to think.
2007-05-03 13:29:36 · answer #4 · answered by The PENsive Insomniac 5 · 0⤊ 1⤋
sure. how's mine.
Its a poem because I said its a poem
It doesn't rhyme or flow
There is no rythm involved
I just say its a poem
So its a poem.
Got IT?
2007-05-03 13:28:55 · answer #5 · answered by Red Winged Bandit 4 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Sounds beautiful...It looks great! I really enjoyed it! I hope you do more work like this. Really. I like poems.
2007-05-03 13:40:43 · answer #6 · answered by e j 2 · 0⤊ 1⤋
yes it is good well i think so u should try putting it on poetry.com they will publish it for u
amanda
2007-05-03 13:30:31 · answer #7 · answered by punk4life32435 1 · 0⤊ 1⤋
I personally don't like it.
It's too..eh, plain.
Common topic.
2007-05-03 13:27:31 · answer #8 · answered by Hollie 3 · 0⤊ 1⤋
I think its very good.
2007-05-03 13:27:19 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
Well I think it's beautiful! well done!!
2007-05-03 13:27:43 · answer #10 · answered by Penney w 5 · 0⤊ 1⤋