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Question

im in 7th grade. its about snowy owls:

I find the snowy owl to be quite an interesting animal. It belongs to the kingdom Animalia, the phylum Chordata, the class Aves, the order Strigiformes, the family Strigidae, the genus Nyctea, and the species Sandiaca along with boobooks, screeching owls, and earless owls.
With a height reaching up to 27 inches and a weight of 4 to 6 pounds, the snowy owl has a reputation as one of the biggest owls in the Arctic. Its wingspan can spread out anywhere from 45-60 inches. Most people are familiar with its winter coat of completely white feathers, and it is not usually distinguished by its summer coat of spotted and striped brown feathers. It is both nocturnal and diurnal, owing to the fact that its habitat, the Arctic, does not darken at night in the summer. Since they have incredible vision and eyesight, snowy owls are able to detect prey from very high up in the sky and swoop down silently to catch that prey.
As stated before, the snowy owl calls the Arctic its home. It also dwells in Canada, Alaska, and sometimes the northernmost states of our country. It prefers to inhibit vast, open spaces such as the tundra, grasslands, or frozen lakes.
Snowy owls eat a number of animals, such as lemmings, hares, voles, shrews, waterfowl, and small birds. Using its amazing vision and especially sensitive hearing, it seeks the prey from up in sky and then, using its special frayed wings, it swoops silently down upon the prey and kills it with its long, curved, needlelike talons.
These animals usually reproduce during the mating season and also when there is an exceptional abundance of their favorite food, lemmings. They are usually sexually mature by the ages of 3 to 5 years. Using echoing calls and a proud display of feathers, the male attracts the female to breed. Following mating, the female usually lays about 5 to 7 round, white eggs a couple of days apart from each other. Finally, after an incubation period of 30 to 33 days, the eggs start hatching. Cute little owlettes as white as snow are welcomed into the world with care, love, and a fresh supply of yummy rodents from their two parents.
Out in the wild, the average life span of a snowy owl is about 15 years. In captivity, however, they can live up to 28 years, almost double their wilderness life span. The adult snowy owl does not have any predators besides old age, since it is at the top of the food chain and the biggest bird in the Arctic. Young owlettes and eggs are in danger of being eaten by foxes and gulls, however. Because its winter environment is very snowy, one of the snowy owl’s adaptations is its dazzling white winter feathers, to help it camouflage in with its surroundings. When the snow melts in the summer, the feathers become brownish to match the trees and twigs. The feathers are also very important to the owl because of what they cover. They warm the powerful wing, which has special mechanics to allow the bird to fly quickly but silently. They also cover the feet protectively to shield the ice cold weather of Arctic winters, which can reach up to -155˚ Fahrenheit.
The snowy owl is usually a pretty isolated owl, unless it is the mating season. Then they are with their partner and babies. It interacts with other owls using a series of hoots and shrieks, much like other birds. Unlike some other birds, however, the snowy owl does not have a melodious harmony to its calls. It does not usually interact with other species, aside from its prey, and that’s only to catch it. It usually hunts during both the day and night, and it is always alert, even when asleep. It’s always on the lookout for more food!
Speaking of food, the snowy owl is a very helpful animal. It helps control the ever growing rodent population. It performs the job of killing only as many animals as is necessary for food. It never takes more than it needs, which is a good thing, because if it did, the entire snowy owl race would eventually starve and die out. It is also one of the least endangered species on the planet.
So, wasn’t that interesting? I bet you now agree with me. Snowy owls are a very nifty and swell animal!

btw, i didnt plagarize. i kno its illegal. i'd get expelled from if i did that.

Answer 1

excellent, I give it an 8, however I would check your facts regarding it surviving -155

Answer 2

aVery well written , indeed. Way better than I could have done at that age. But, it might have failed to capture peoples attention, as it may have been too factual, and therefor a little dry. It seems you're trying to get in as much info on the animal in as short a time, and with a few words as possible, which is a trick i used when writing special incident report as guard. But, most people hav etrouble absorbing all that info and still getting a sense and feel of the story. You could try using a more drama inducing descriptive way of introducing this animal. First there's the opening act. You must create interest for this animal, almost as if you're telling a story. You may not even tell the reader which animal it is right away even, but let them wonder. Paint a picture of this sharp eyed stunningly beautiful predator, and what it's doing. You have to capture the reader's attention, and arrest it. Opening act , story, closing words leaving an impact on the reader. Hope this helped. I too, didn't read the whole essay, I'mm afraid, You are very smart and articulate, and an excellent writer. But you probably need more of the fiction writers technique.

Answer 3

If i had the time and an actual paper copy I could properly critique it, but that cant happen so here's what I saw off top. It appears like some of it was copied right out of the book you got the info from. You also started repeating some things, like their habitat, mating, and something else, but i forgot what it was. I know you have to use the information from other sources but try to make it sound more original (use your own words) Overall, I give it a 3

Answer 4

im still in english so i know how hard it must have been to write that thing but i dont know what ur rules are in your class but in mine we write out numbers from 0-10 to make it more formal i guess but other than that it was kinda informative...my answer has to be from 6-8

Answer 5

uhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh wow is it over yet yea it is htank god i fell asleep haha i give it a 1 haha jk jk i only read the 1st paragraph but still i was boredederest than ever! mke it more pizzazy!

Answer 6

Great essay? did you copy it from different sites? copy and paste? plagerism is illegal. but if you didntthen good job.10. it sounds like it was stolen from an encyclopedia, which means your advanced

Answer 7

7-8. Good overall writing style, too many cliches, adjective abuse.

Answer 8

10 definately! that was great for a 7th grader. well done.

Answer 9

i think it sounds good, but if it's an essay i don't think you're supposed to use "i think". personal pronouns aren't good!

hope it helps :)

Answer 10

i give this a 9!! great job!! yay!!!!!! =]
oh and i think it would be better if u didn't use first person (i, me, ect.)