Can someone please reword this for me(disregard the accounting part)?

Question

Analytical, organized and motivated accounting student seeks to obtain a challenging position which will maximize opportunities in a professional environment towards career advancement.

Answer 1

Delete "to obtain" and "environment" and reorder the end.

Motivated, organized, and professional accounting student seeks a challenging position which will build a foundation for future opportunties for career advancement

Answer 2

How about

Analytical, organized and motivated accounting student seeks a challenging position in a professional environment to maximize opportunities for career advancement.

Good luck - :)

Answer 3

Analytical, organized and motivated student is seeking to obtain a professional position which will maximize opportunities for career advancement and present plenty of challenges.
This could also be changed up by omitting one of the three descriptive words at the beginning (analytical, organized, or motivated) and then keeping the rest of the sentence.
It just didnt flow because you used so many words to describe yourself and then only one to describe the job that you want. The "in a professional environment" just sounds thrown in there in the wrong place, so I reworded that part.

Answer 4

Analytical, organized, and motivated accounting student seeks challenging position in professional environment, which will maximize opportunities for career advancement.

Answer 5

Accounting student looking for position in related field.

Isn't that what you really want? If it is say it. Forget the giberish it impresses no one at leat no one that matters.

We use simple straight forward english in the business world.

Answer 6

Why do you want to reword it? It sounds good to me.