I AM AN ESL STudent CAN SOME 1 PLEASE LOOK AT THIS POEM AND COMMENTS PLEASE?

Question

Imagination = exaguration

my art teacher always look like a box of crayons
always wear 70's clotehs
full of red, yellow, orange and pink polka dots

my accounting teacher looks very pathetic
he never gets any opurtunity to comb his hair
or sleep well at night

my business teacher has a very high potentail of ending up in hollywood
she is very compatitive, changes her clothes two times a day
sometimes studnets call her chatter box

my chemistry teacher always look panicked
i can never understand him
when i look in his eyes i can't tell whether he is affariad
students might mix the wrong chemicals or whether he hasn't tought them enough

my calculus teacher thinks she is very smart
i know she is right
but she is very famous for being a day dreamer

my drama teacher
always do crazy things on the stage
but lets just say she loves dramatic irony

my english teacher
firstly, interestingly boring
secondly, funny in a little annoying way
in conclusion, a fascinating personality

my ESL teacher really like sto say
Noooooo! Not like this sweety
and please say please

my fitness teacher is like a rabbit
always jumping up and down
never looks satisfied

my geography teacher
if ever given a chance to be born again
love to be a super man

my history teacher
very tall, anoraxic, quite and sleepy eyes behind thick specticles
looks like wars and dates will kill him someday



my math teacher is very intelligent and preety
she was nominated for miss universe
but she faild because she got so nervous and forgot what is 10x10

my physics teacher
everyday i find him sleeping in the class
during every class he tells he was an asteranot before deciding to become a teacher

my biology teacher is not interesting
he always makes me throw up in class

my music teacher lets just say
a mail version of marry poppins

i never want to go this school
my immagination is very wild
cross your fingers and hope that my poem is nothing but a hyperbole

Answer 1

It needs work. There are many mis-spellings, some transpositions and some inappropriate uses of words. First, let me point out that their is no word "exaguration." The proper word is exaggeration.

Stanza 1: There is a transposition of letters in "clotehs." It should be clothes.

Stanza 2: What is an "oportunity"? Is that a different kind of opportunity?

Stanza 3: What does it mean to have high "potentail," rather than high potential, or to be very "compatitive," rather than very competitive? Also, there is a transposition of the letters in the word "studnets." It should read students.

Stanza 4: What are the words "affariad" and "tought"? I think you mean affraid and taught. Also, I don't think the use of the word "whether" a second time is needed. It's first use implies a choice. So all you need to do afterward is supply the choices.

when i look in his eyes i can't tell whether he is affraid
students might mix the wrong chemicals or that he hasn't taught them enough

Stanza 6: You have a problem with the agreement of noun and verb. It should read: "my drama teacher always does crazy things on the stage." Also, I think you can eliminate the word "but" in this stanza, because it does not convey anything needed, nor does it contribute to the overall coherence of the stanza.

Stanza 8: You have a typo where you split off the final letter of the word likes and added it to the word to: "like sto." Correct this before handing in your final draft.

Stanza 10: I would eliminate the word "ever," and add the word "would."

my geography teacher
if given a chance to be born again
would love to be a super man

Stanza 11: Check the spelling of the words "anoraxic" and "specticles." It should be anorexic and spectacles.

Stanza 12: What does it mean to be "preety"? I think you mean pretty. Also, you omitted the letter "e" in failed. The last sentence in this stanza seems somehwhat awkward. It might flow better if you changed it to "but failed when she nervously forgot what is 10 x 10."

Stanza 13: What is an "asteranot"? Shouldn't this be astronaut?

Stanza 15: So your music teacher is a postal version of marry poppins, huh? The word for the masculine gender is male, not "mail." Also, "marry poppins" is spelled mary poppins.

Stanza 16: What happened here? You had the word imagination spelled correctly at the beginning. Now you have added an extra "m." Is that to simply draw the word out, or are you confused about its spelling?

Let me point out that I am not an English teacher. On the whole, I think your concept is creative. You just need to work a little on the execution.

Answer 2

entertaining poetry. spell check please!