Please tell me what you think of this poem I wrote
You killed me
And you liked it.
Didn't you?
Liked the power,
The control,
Had me,
Broke me,
Destroyed me.
You killed me
And you liked it.
Slashed me,
Smashed me,
All your sick games.
Made my world
Turn black
You took it all.
You killed me
And you liked it.
Tore at me,
Beat me,
Mind games too.
You beat me down
Ruined it all
I hate you.
You killed me
And you liked it.
Controlled me,
Scarred me,
I'll never be OK.
You did this, but,
Despite it all;
I love you.
2007-04-27 12:35:03 · 18 answers · asked by Anonymous in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
I LOVE IT! It sounds like my previous relationship. He never physically abused me but he pulled me through lots of crap and I still loved him. It also kinda reminds me of how my father treated me. Don't listen to all those nay-sayers above me. Writing like this really helps release anger.
2007-04-27 12:43:39 · answer #1 · answered by Kameo 5 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Good. Kind of puts me in the mind of when Eminem is killing Kim but is saying I love you at the same time. It also shows the everday internal struggles we go through! One.
2007-04-27 19:42:56 · answer #2 · answered by Battle Cat 4 · 0⤊ 1⤋
A lot of anger. It could use a little work here and there. But it is an expression of how your feeling, so it's truthful.
2007-04-27 19:39:26 · answer #3 · answered by MJ 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
its kind sick but has a lot of meaning let me guess someone broke up with you
PRETTY GOOD but like butterfly's and rainbows kinda poems.
2007-04-27 19:39:36 · answer #4 · answered by kelso 1 · 0⤊ 1⤋
It reminds me of "My Black Daliha" from Holloywood Undead but its good
2007-04-27 19:37:46 · answer #5 · answered by Kneisha G 3 · 0⤊ 1⤋
I really like it! Although it did bring some bad memories rushing back!
2007-04-27 19:37:46 · answer #6 · answered by onecrazymama05 4 · 1⤊ 2⤋
Horrible. I don't know what else to say other than it is absolute crap.
Your thoughts are trite and puerile, and there is no substance to your work. Just because you divided your petty sentences into stanzas does not make it poetry.
2007-04-27 19:37:19 · answer #7 · answered by anonymous 6 · 0⤊ 3⤋
Ummm, i didn't like it until the end...........it's just the typical female that takes a man back!!! LOL!!!
2007-04-27 19:38:15 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
are you one of those EMO people who cut themselves??? Don't worry you can get help for this condition
2007-04-27 19:38:03 · answer #9 · answered by tresvoisdieu 1 · 0⤊ 1⤋
pretty good with a suprise ending!
2007-04-27 19:38:33 · answer #10 · answered by JEN 7 · 0⤊ 1⤋