Poem help?

Question

can you help with my poem its about strawberries, i just need a metaphor but can't think of one. And anything extra will be a help. Maxium 5 lines because it suppose to be 10 and i did half already.
Thanks

Answer 1

Good:
Strawberry sour, and sugary,
A taste and the taste is all you can see,
IT over overwhelms your mind,
And it can even make a scrooge become kind.

Bad:
The color of blood as it's skin,
I swear the Satan is it's kin,
It's so sour it reminds me of acid when it's on my tongue
And it's so malicious it can destroy your lung.

Answer 2

I won't write it for you, but I'll give you some suggestions:

Look at the strawberries' physical characteristics. Perhaps something is as red as a ripe strawberry in an endless green field?

How about its taste? Someone or something as sweet as a strawberry?

How do they feel?

They go good with ice cream, yes? Maybe you complement someone just as strawberries and whipped cream go together?

Appeal to the senses (that's the entire point of using sensory language). Even if someone gives you an exact poem as an answer, I'd suggest thinking about how he/she did it and emulating rather than copying it. You'll learn more, and when it comes time for the test, you'll be able to do it rather than wishing you had Yahoo Answers at your side.

Answer 3

Don't beat around the bush, as u can find me with one big push. Underneath my bed, you'll find a fruit that is juicy and red. However, I have no roots and no boots to find. Only a flat top and some spots on my behind.

hahahaha! That's the best I could do for ya. :) Good luck!

Answer 4

Roses are red, violets are blue, my girlfriend's lips taste like strawberries too! =<)

Answer 5

strawberries are like men, with alittle "sugar", you bring out the best in them.