Overall, is this a good cover letter?

Question

contact info left out for privacy:


I am applying for the _____ position you recently posted on The Washington Post online. This position is of great interest as it compares well with my education, experience and career interests.
As your position requirement describes, I would be competent in designing and producing presentation graphics. As well as creating, editing and proofreading documents, correspondence and reports. I consider myself competent in managing multiple priorities and meeting deadlines as necessary. I currently hold a Bachelor of Fine Arts in Communication Studies and an Associate of Fine Arts in Graphic Design. I have worked with the programs: Adobe CS, QuarkXPress, and Microsoft Office. I consider myself a fast learner and a team player. For your convenience I have current work samples online at www._____.com. My enclosed résumé provides more details on my qualifications.

if I start the new Paragraph of For your convenience...can I include in this paragraph my contact info too?

Answer 1

Reverse the role. Suppose YOU were the person getting it. What would You think.

I think it's a good letter,. Beware of things like, "meeting deadlines, as necessary. "
Meeting deadlines IS necessary. You just eliminate 2 words if you just say "meeting deadlines."
"I consider myself competent.""
Of course you are, but "proficient" means you are better than just "competent."
"Is of great interest." Try "interests me'.
2 less words.
Basically it is a goodletter. I hope you get an interview.

Answer 2

Get rid of "As your position requirement describes" -- it's unnecessary.

Also, it's not that you "would be" competent. You "are more than competent to design and produce presentation graphics.

Try this:

Please accept this letter as my application for the _____ position posted in the Washington Post online classifieds. I believe my education and experience make me a perfect fit and I would welcome the opportunity to be considered for the position.

I am more than competent to design and produce presentation graphics, and to create, edit and proofread documents. I have experience managing multiple priorities and have no problem doing what is necessary to meet all deadlines.

I earned a Bachelor of Fine Arts in Communication Studies and an Associate of Fine Arts in Graphic Design. While my experience is set out in my enclosed resume, I have worked specifically with Adobe CS, QuarkXPress and Microsoft Office.

I look forward to hearing from you to schedule a personal interview to discuss the skills and qualifications that I have to offer. Please feel free to contact me at [phone number] at your convenience.

Sincerely,

____________________

Answer 3

you use the word "as" too often. overall, it's too wordy, has fragments and sounds like yadayadayada. trim the fat like this:

your sentence: As your position requirement describes, I would be competent in designing and producing presentation graphics. As well as creating, editing and proofreading documents, correspondence and reports.

rewrite: I am competent in designing and producing graphics that are suitable for presentations. I can create, edit, and proofread all types of documentation.

your sentence: I consider myself competent in managing multiple priorities and meeting deadlines as necessary.

be more definite as if stating a fact, what you "consider" sounds weak and based on your own opinion. also, meeting a deadline is not negotiable so lose the "as necessary"

rewrite: I am skilled at multi-tasking and meeting aggressive deadlines.

also, you say: I currently hold a Bachelor of Fine...

does this mean that you might lose your hold? try using plain and direct language, such as, "I hold a Bachelor..

keep it simple, use direct language in simple present tense.

Answer 4

I am not an expert at this but I found some errors:

1. As well as....(an imcomplete sentence, should be a complete sentence)
2. Should be: I have worked with the following programs:
3. Does resume have those things over both e's?

Maybe someone more knowledgeable can help.

Added later: Wooder's sounds good.

Answer 5

Just incorporate the intent(s) you're making use of for the role, and what (headquartered to your qualifications) you'll be able to carry to the role. Don't make it an extended or precise letter.

Answer 6

Sounds like a great cover letter!

Answer 7

Sounds good but add a request for an interview.

Answer 8

Not bad.Just try and summarize it some more.And too many use of position and competent.But apart from that its perfect.Good Luck.

Answer 9

The letter is good. Start a new paragrah with For your convenience....

Answer 10

I think so...you've included all of the important info...good job. and good luck getting the job(s)!