LONELY RED BAG
18.4.07
Lonely red bag in the hallway
Full of stuff I just might need on my journey
Toothbrush and nightie most important
And the number of my attorney
Its been coming for years
But I didn’t know when
It was just a matter of time
That signature with my favourite fountain pen
Kids all grown and left home
It seemed the next stage was to go
From a black hole in my life
To another world and to leave the show
I pick up my red bag with my cold hands
And I close that wooden door and I shake
Im on my own, no one at my side
My heart does no longer ache
And as I reach the end of our road
I take one more look over my shoulder
The deed is done thank god I prey
The sun is boiling hot but I swear its getting colder
Must be my heart
Its leant to cope with no feeling
As time raced on without me
The minutes and seconds it was stealing
2007-04-17 20:08:15 · 9 answers · asked by shariwharton 4 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities
Wow you are really talented, I really like this, its beautiful and i feel what u r sayin......My daughter does creative writing so i dig this very much so.......Keep it up sweety......
2007-04-17 20:13:02 · answer #1 · answered by KATRINA A 3 · 3⤊ 1⤋
nicely, in the beginning, i might say to enhance your character extra. The outstanding angel going to burning a dull physique is rather interesting, yet perchance there could be extra tricks on the beginning up, besides basically a dream that propels her to accomplish that. additionally, each so often, seems, dates, and acceptance are not sufficient to describe an angel. there's a sprint superficiality in her. If she is "prevalent", is she biased or impartial? Will she help the "prevalent" student, or will she additionally help the "unpopular" student? Does she turn down the dates that she frequently gets? Or does she settle for them? If she accepts them, does she ever fall into conflicts with relationship previous boyfriends? Does she have any specific pastimes, something that fascinates her? improve her. i might additionally propose to 'propose' that she's an angel. the way an angel interacts with others is distinctive than, say, how a bitter widow interacts with others. the way she outfits, the way she thinks. She additionally regarded rather "whiny" interior the beginning up. i substitute right into a sprint greatly surprised that she objected to waking up early. Her mom holding mum for 2 hours, then popping the assertion, would represent that she thinks her daughter isn't reliable sufficient to shelter death until she's completely wakeful. How her father dealt with her while she substitute into alive seems very reliable, as she did no longer look to have any issues because of the fact the angel. that's particularly confusing as she desperate to burn the physique. She additionally seems to be on incredible words together with her mom. in spite of the undeniable fact that, the way she all of sudden committs arson implies there are underlying issues below her angel outdoors. perchance hint at them extra on the beginning up? How she believed her dream to be fact additionally regarded rather unusual.
2016-11-25 19:07:45 · answer #2 · answered by ? 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
EVEN THOUGH UR LONELY BECAUSE OF AN EMPTY HOUSE REMEMBER THEY LOVE U & STILL NEED U. UR DIVORCED, KIDS HAVE GROWN & U DON'T KNOW WHERE U FIT IN. TAKE THIS CHANCE AS A NEW BEGINING OF FINDING URSELF LOOK IN THE MIRROR & INTRODUCE URSELF AS U R. SOAR LIKE AN EAGLE ENJOY UR FREEDOM AS WELCOMING A NEW DAY. GOOD LUCK 2 U & UR NEW ADVENTURES , TAKE ADVANTAGE OF LIFE
2007-04-17 20:56:32 · answer #3 · answered by ttkmb 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
this is life u role with the punches and make it throw don't feel sorry for Ur self make it throw and know that life is hard and it needs a real strong hart to make it throw and always keep remembering the good memory's cause this will make u go on and feel happy and remember that the memory's will never die
2007-04-17 20:14:42 · answer #4 · answered by sweet boy 1 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Well they say poetry and writing can be an escape in itself. It certainly seems to be (quite literally) for you. Good luck, but always remember looking back can be dangerous!
2007-04-17 20:12:54 · answer #5 · answered by waggy 6 · 2⤊ 0⤋
The scene is very good, but don't get me wrong (I love poetry). It's just I struggled reading through this one.
2007-04-17 20:15:51 · answer #6 · answered by maverick 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
If this describes your life in any way I hope it will soon get better.
And I will pray for you and better days ahead.
2007-04-17 20:19:06 · answer #7 · answered by Warren D 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Here is ,to a bright new future.
2007-04-18 20:23:44 · answer #8 · answered by RAINBOW 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
We should marry in no time
2007-04-18 03:21:53 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 1⤋