Do you think this would make a great story? Heres the summary...?

Question

A girl name Elle Lewis is trying to escape from her past, after she learns she did something horrible. She ends driving along an old country road and she comes to a thick forest, where she almost has a head on collison with an oversized truck, and she ends up swerving the avoid it and crashes into the trees. She wakes up in a hospital in the lakeside town of Waterfront, with chunks of her memory missing, (i.e. can't remember how she got to the town, and can't remember the terrible thing she did) Since her car was totalled in the accident she decides to explore the town in the mean time, and she ends up liking the town very much and decides to buy a small house. 2 weeks after her arrival she comes across one of the towns oldest buildings, an old pub a few blocks from her home. There she meets many colorful characters including one of the local "crazies" Jacob o'Conner who warns her she is in danger, that he doesn't want the residents to claim another victom (to be continued)

because at night they all become demonized zombies. He tells her she can't stay out past sunset and to leave the town immeditly. At first she thinks he is crazy, but soon finds out the grimm truth. Now she has to escape from the undead who are not after her flesh, but her soul and the very life with in her veins.

Its still sketchy, but its based on a dream I had. Thesummary may sound cruddy, but trust me the full version and the twist at the end is better.

Answer 1

Seems a bit too ordinary and done. You begin the story as one thing and it turns completely different. What does her doing something horrible have to with anything? or the memory loss? What is keeping her in the town, why not just leave during the day? Hell, I'd walk if I had to. Why two weeks? How did she not notice zombies then? Where does she get money to buy a small house in only two weeks?

There are quite a few problems to this story, I think you need a more original idea first off, if you ever decide to publish, it is unlikely any company will purchase it(too common).

Answer 2

It kind of sounds like every zombie story Ive ever read including House by Dekker and Peretti which was the worst book I ever read. You will have to go a long way to make this original. I dont know why but most zombie stories tend to fall into the same rut. Work with a good outline, some good character studies and a story curve and add a lot of backstories. Otherwise Im afraid it's just another B movie zombie story. Needs work. Pax - C.

Answer 3

I think there may be something in your idea. Also, excellent idea, using your dreams. Now, does the terrible thing she did relate to the story? What's the connection with the zombies and her bad deed and memory loss, if there's any at all. Will she ever remember herself, or will she just go on in this town trying to survive. I'm just bringing this stuff up so that you can think it over if you're actually going to start writing this.

Answer 4

Ok, Just remember you asked!!! this misses the boat on so many levels........
What late night movie was this?
Why doesn't Elle travel to Scotland....(do a little research to describe) She's gone to take over an estate from relatives she 's never met...Everyone she knows tries to get her to sell the place and not make the trip but something from deep inside her pulls at her...How perplexing....But before she can take possession the place burns down to the ground....everyone is amazed that a centuries old estate would've lost so many rooms to a fire...
and the police suspect an arson...While the police do their investigation Elle goes on a mysterious journey of intrigue and murder to find out????

Answer 5

It's hard to escape from your past once you're in hospital because of insurance claims, notification of relatives, media attention, etc. Considering how easily accessible information is these days, and assuming Elle's friends and family are looking for her, it's a tough to call to say they won't be able to track her down.

And I'm sorry, but zombies? What's with that?

Answer 6

How come she spent 2 weeks in the town with no problems if the zombies come out every night? All she has to do, to leave, is to buy a new car. If she can afford a new house, she can afford a new car.

Answer 7

in assessment to "previous woman", i will use the manners my mom gave me while answering this question. This plot seems rather imprecise. There are surely many historic events that have this comparable define, so be confident to tell apart them while writing all of it out. This surely sounds somewhat like the 1st Queen Elizabeth of england. As I stated, in case you variety this tale from others, you would be completely high quality. Oh, and disrespect the assertion of "previous woman" approximately seashores no longer being suitable for a kingdom. She for sure hasn't heard of the Palaiokastro citadel and Village in Crete which basically so happens to sit down down on a coastline front. the only component i will agree along with her on is that your grammar desires somewhat artwork. :) good success! ~~ ††MeryKheper††

Answer 8

hahahahahahaha.

wow.

um.

so are you going for mystery or horror?
because you start out headed for a mystery and end up in a rather ordinary and overused horror story.
I would say drop the zombies, but there is an audience out there that likes them, so you may get away with it. I just wont be in that audience.

Answer 9

I've been in towns like that. No nightlife to speak of. Best to just stay in.
Delightful. Love to see more.

Answer 10

Sounds good but why did she "learn" she did something bad wouldn't you know immediately. Sounds good you should use some irony in the book.