Midnight Falls
by: Adam Snow
Walking alone in a cold forsaken world are we. The blood for
which you lust falls upon my lips. The shadows surround us on this dark forsaken night. Holding your hand as the midnight moon shines upon us thru the midnight haze waiting for the midnight song of darken desire. You left me to fade away in this midnight murky haze as my blood drips upon your naked soul. You abandon me for the midnight haze as you slowly fade out of my life. Now alone am I in a world gone cold. This is what you have done to me.
2007-04-14 18:18:45 · 6 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities
Love it, deep, dark and moving. Can feel the pain and anguish of loss.
2007-04-14 22:30:33 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
If you are Frank Castle alias Adam Snow, then I'd say I understand the bitterness and pain your poems communicate. Some are real scary! I'd urge you, young man, just hang on in there. . . . every dark cloud has a silver lining!!
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**quite scary site in the wake of the Virginia Tech psycho killings.
2007-04-15 10:25:08 · answer #2 · answered by ari-pup 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like; but you use the word midnight too many times, if your poem was in a more rhythmic stanza format it would fit fine. Maybe look in a thesaurus for another word for midnight, and use that in place of some of the uses of midnight. ^_^
2007-04-19 21:02:44 · answer #3 · answered by ..*Real-ality*.. 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
This is a wonderful piece! Your emotions come through so strongly that it can be felt as I read this. Good piece, I love the way you use description. Any more pieces to share?
2007-04-20 19:27:16 · answer #4 · answered by lillanigyrl 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
4.7/5 it explains love, loss, anger, and a hint of jelousy its good :D
2007-04-15 10:07:42 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
its deep. i like it.
2007-04-15 13:50:08 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋