Am I really ready for this?
Is it really the role I'm supposed to play?
How do I know if the director was not a bit hopeful
When he was casting this day?
Alone, in my space I feel brave and free
in a crowd of strangers, not sure what to be
It's getting easier as time succeeds,
I'm finding my voice
Owning my smile
Taking my time to seek and find
The shadow of the girl I left behind
Are they really angels?
This cast of characters all around
Did I really choose them, before I even knew them
What was I thinking this day?
Sitting behind the keyboard I feel brave and free
When somebody reads this, not sure what I see
I'm finding the answers one by one
I embrace my choice
I own my smile
Respecting time to seek and find
The happy little girl I left behind
No more labels, no more crooks
No more cheaters evil looks
No more villians, just heroes
It's my creation, I'll choose what goes
2007-04-07 01:18:11 · 9 answers · asked by meganzopf 3 in Social Science ➔ Psychology
While taking a literature class in English, my teacher had us read short stories, plays, poetry etc...and our assignment was to respond to each and everyone. By the end of the semester, we all got to know each other on a different level. So yes, this is a reader response sort of thing I am doing.
2007-04-07 01:39:19 · update #1
Title ---- "My Success".
I suggest to make equal # of lines per stanza.
Stanza 1 --- 6 OK
Stanza 2 --- 5, add last line: " I feel her as inspirational"
Stanza 3 --- 6 OK
Stanza 4 --- 5, add last line: "I feel her as inspirational"
Stanza 5 --- 4, add 2 lines: for line 2 --"No more baggage, no more books" & for the last line "It's my great, great moves"
2007-04-07 16:49:03 · answer #1 · answered by PJA 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Flexible Reality
regards,
Chris
2007-04-07 08:33:00 · answer #2 · answered by ChrisJ 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Impressive. I really like the last stanza as it has the cadence of the old school's out rhyme that connects to the childhood you left behind.
2007-04-07 08:24:51 · answer #3 · answered by Sharon M 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Emily Dickinson's shy boisterous spirit is alive and well (that's a compliment, in case you didn't know.)
2007-04-07 08:39:43 · answer #4 · answered by Khnopff71 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Very good writing and insight into yourself and others. I enjoyed reading it and think you have a talent for it! Keep it up. I think writing is a great way to deal with our deepest feelings. Thanks for sharing it with us.
2007-04-07 11:44:24 · answer #5 · answered by vanhammer 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Nice.
2007-04-07 08:22:31 · answer #6 · answered by Barbra 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
good one.. but are you asking for a comment on your poem?
2007-04-07 08:25:54 · answer #7 · answered by charm 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
rather good and meaningfull poem...
2007-04-07 08:59:35 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
Vanity, all is vanity
2007-04-07 08:26:12 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 1⤋