Is this a good introduction to an essay? Even if you didn't read the book?

Question

In the book, The Pearl by John Steinback, the protagonist of the novella which is Kino finds a pearl while he is pearl diving.


Can you fix it to make it sound better?
Can you fix grammer?
Can you fix spelling

I dont understand if it is confusing
THANK YOU

Answer 1

"The Pearl" is actually a very, very good book. It has very interesting themes. The Pearl is a 1947 novella by John Steinbeck. It tells the story of a poor Mexican diver who finds a magnificent pearl which he hopes will improve his family's life; however, he finds that his new wealth brings only corruption of the soul and the blinding luxuries of 'civilized' life. Like many of Steinbeck's works, the book primarily addresses the issues of poverty, wealth, and an unjust society, particularly focusing on wealth's corrupting effect on relationships and its connection with happiness. It's the same old story - you and your family come upon some luck and everyone else in the community tries to get all they can out of you. Kino, the father turns from a very caring man to a greedy man because of the pearl he found. He only wants his family to have the best, education for his son, a wedding and a nice home for his wife. But trying to get waway from the greedy townspeople, he and his family leave and go up into the mountains. There are trackers looking for them and in the end, Kino kills them, but one of them gets a shot off and the bullet kills their baby son. They return to their village with a bloody blanket, dead son, and disappointed wife and dejected husband. Kino throws the 'damned' pearl back into the sea. It has not brought him the happiness he thought. Surely, you can see lot of themes here and ideas to write. I hope so. What you have written is good - but as a teacher, I would be looking for you to do something with a little bit more imagination. Remember - the story does not start with the pearl find - but with the scorpion who bit the baby......

Answer 2

To make this sentence even better, try the following:

-The author is John Steinbeck, not John Steinback.
"...The Pearl by John Steinbeck,..."

-don't use "in the book". If this is a report about a book that your teacher assigned, they probably know that The Pearl by John Steinbeck is a book.
"In The Pearl by John Steinbeck,..."

-There are a few grammar mistakes. There should be a comma after novella and after Kino.

-This sentence rambles a bit. It goes from protagonist to which is to finds a pearl to pearl diving. The word pearl, though only used twice is overused.

-Put little more detail--what does that pearl hold, importance.

-more vivid language- adjectives

This is how I would write it:

In The Pearl by John Steinbeck, the protagonist, Kino, discovers an interesting (more description) pearl while on a pearl diving trip. Kino does not know what this pearl holds in store for him...This pearl brings...

Answer 3

Make your introduction short and very clear. The 'meat' of the essay comes in the other paragraphs.

The Pearl by John Steinback is the story of Kino who finds a pearl while he is pearl diving.

Answer 4

Try, The book The Pearl , By John Steinbeck is an interesting tale of adventure while pearl diving.

Answer 5

The Pearl, written by John Steinbeck, is a novella about a protaganist named Kino, who encounters a pearl while pearl diving.

Answer 6

Without adding to or subtracting anything from what you wrote, this is how I would rewrite it: "Kino, the protagonist in John Steinbeck's "The Pearl", finds a pearl while diving."

Answer 7

Woah, thats not an essay .
An essay needs a thesis, DONT retell the story.
And done use pearl while pearl diving, its monotonous

If you teacher didnt give you an essay prompt then.
Try to compare the book to another book.
Talk about a relevant theme in book
*Intro should be like this*
1-2 sentences telling what the story is about. 1-2 sentence thesis. Then a sentence that will connect your intro to your body paragraph
*Then start on the body*

but you really need thesis

message me if you want help

Answer 8

you should say in the book The Pearl by John Stein back is mostly about how a guy ent down to find a pearl wile he was pearly diveing..
thas way it sounds more fuller and it dont seem like u didnt read the book {{dont worrie i never read miens}}

Answer 9

how about something like
I am writing about the book "The Pearl" by John Steinback.
I found it interesting because...
I didn't like it because...

Or you could ask someone who read it for advice.
Remember you have to underline the book title.

You could also write the essay on the computer so you can check grammar and spelling automatically.

Answer 10

first of all u should start with a retorical question or an idea or an anecdote.
then explain and begin to introduce the book... after that start with your thesis which is the main idea of the story or main idea of the point ur trying to make.