I am 19 years old and have been writing since i was a young child!
This is something that is in my blood and i love to do it!
I am thinking of tryin enter a few competitions with but i would like to know what people gueninely thought of it first!
I have an authors page on bebo i will give you a link to
http://light-my-muse.bebo.com
If you have a bebo account i would appreciate any reviews!
Constructive criticism welcome!
2007-04-06 01:59:06 · 8 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
I cannot post them here - there isnt enough characters - sorry guys!
thanks all comments so far - really helpful!!
2007-04-06 05:06:41 · update #1
i think your poems are wonderful and that you should enter a contest.
2007-04-06 02:20:04 · answer #1 · answered by deeksha s 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
You're poems are for the most part well writing. While reading your poems,i felt that some of the words were used only to rythm with the context of that line, but otherwise you displayed fantastic imagery and I could detect that you are very passionate about writing, while i was reading your poems. The one that touched me the most was " Unleash me" It was a very powerful poem that displays feelings that people can really relate to. From what i've read, you seem to be a fantastic writer, so i would have to say, give it your all in the competitions!
2007-04-06 02:25:45 · answer #2 · answered by Ashly 2 · 0⤊ 1⤋
I would tend to agree with Ashly, although I'm not really into poetry I sensed a lot of emotion and hard work and it pays off. However like Ashly i too feel that some of the words were only there because they rhyme, don't let this put you off because you really do have true talent. Enter some competitions!
Sarah x
2007-04-06 03:50:31 · answer #3 · answered by SEXYSERI 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
the poem was quite good though there were some words i did not understand......some words which u used were mostly only for rhyming with the previous line. But otherwis the poem was good with quite a lot of feelings..u can enter a competition but jus' b sure u give it in simple english
2007-04-06 23:30:18 · answer #4 · answered by Ash 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I read Unleash Me. It was truly beautiful. Your imagry is gorgeous and vivid. Your flow and rhythm is perfect. It is very obvious that this comes from the soul. Your website is very nice also. I bookmarked it and will go back to read the rest later. You are a very talented poet. I give Unleash Me a ten plus. Good luck to you. Pax - C
2007-04-06 15:22:43 · answer #5 · answered by Persiphone_Hellecat 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
what is the title of the poem? what is your name? Could be better to post it here or provide more details to the link since I could be interested but see several comments and poems there. which poem?
sorry cant help much.
good luck
2007-04-06 02:25:09 · answer #6 · answered by ari-pup 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I read "Unleash Me." You like to play with words, but they don't come together into a coherent poem. Keep writing.
2007-04-06 13:06:40 · answer #7 · answered by TessLouise 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Could you post one on here so that we can comment..and not lose the thread, please?
2007-04-06 04:54:18 · answer #8 · answered by i_am_jean_s 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋