What do you people think of my song?

Question

hAWAIAN bEAT
yOU COULD BE hawaiaN, JAMACIAN,
SPANISH, FRENCH, BRITHISH, AFRICAN,
IT DOESN'T MATTER WHAT YOU ARE
TO DO THE HAWAIAN BEAT!

EITHER JAMMIN' IN JAMAICA,
OR SPEAKIN' ESPANOL,
iT DOESN'T MATTER WHAT YOU
ARE TO DO THE HAWAIAN ROLL!
(OOHHH! OOHHH!)

bECAUSE WE'RE DOIN' THE HAWAIAN BEAT!
aND WE'RE NOT GONNA GET OFF OUR FEET!
Why Would you be PlaNNiN' to eat?!
WheN We're DOIN' THE HAWAIAN BEAT!

EITHER NAUGHTy, BOY OR GIRL,
iN HAWAII, 'CAUSE THAT'S WHAT i SAY!
WHEN WE'RE TRYIN' TO TRAVEL THE WORLD,
USIN' THE HAWAIAN WAY!
(OOHHH! OOHHH!)

because WE'RE DOIN' THE HAWAIAN BEAT!
AND WE'RE NOT GONNA GET OFF OUR FEET!
WHY WOULD YOU BE PLANNIN' TO EAT?!
WHEN WE'RE DOIN' THE HAWAIAN bEAT!

iT iS IN HAWAII.....aLSO iN TOKYO!
eVEN IN THE bAHAMAS, aND iN SANFRANCISCO!
WE'RE NOT GONNA PARTY, OR GO, GO, GO!
All that we are here for(!),
IS, JUST, TO, KNOW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

There's more..............it's just that it won't fit on this!!!!!LOL!!!!!

Answer 1

The lyrics sound like it's a great up-beat song. If you ever record it then please tell me because I'd love to hear it. I have a band myself.

http://www.virb.com/roadofintentions

Good Luck!

Answer 2

Interesting.

I'm going to give you a song I wrote and it should fit here:

One Less Idiot

Hooligan doing one-oh-five
In his best friend’s car
Drives on a dare,
Devil-may-care
When he rolls it leaving the bar

Well, I say that’s one less idiot
One less idiot
One less idiot we have to worry about


Greaseball pushing the hard junk
Just two blocks from the school
Too late to retreat
When a client pulled heat
Found his corpse in the city pool

Well, I say that’s one less idiot
One less idiot
One less idiot we have to worry about


BRIDGE
Gangs snuff other gangs, and are retaliated
Life term rapists killed, while incarcerated
Why do we ever feel sorry or strange?
Wasting our time and effort and change
Farewell, good riddance, it’s a small pittance
Of a tab they run high and won’t pay you and I

Each time it’s one less idiot
One less idiot
One less idiot we have to worry about


REPEAT CHORUS OUT

Answer 3

Great Song

Answer 4

i dont like it at all to be honest wit chu im sorry to say that n i dont think id wanna see more of it

Answer 5

I could be really mean, but I won't. Just not feeling it dawg.

Answer 6

great song it awsome amd i hope u achieve your goal but it reminds me of latin girls from black eyed peas

Answer 7

Sounds pretty good so far...... keep going you might have something....... :)