ITS ME AGAIN do u like this?

Question

my ring fell down the sink
i really should start to think
when he comes home hes gonna be in a fit
hope fully he wont start to hit
for that ring cost a good paycheck
im a nervous reck

this one is horrible iknow i couldnt think of any thing else i was tierd

no im not in abbussive relation ship lol i get my inspiration from tv lol i hate this poem so much it sounds like a 2 year old wrote it.. blahh it sucks and im too young to try out for american idol but watch for me cause i am.

Answer 1

Try adding "And" to the beginning of the last line...it helps the rythym flow...add a melody, and you've got yourself a country (song) hit!

P.S. Judging by some other answers, you should try to get a recording contract! Try American Idol next year?

Answer 2

I am a little curious about where you get your inspiration.

I hope the "start to hit" phrase is not a sign that you are in an abusive relationship.

Answer 3

since the ring fell down the sink,
when he gets home he'll raise a stink,
Hide your hand till he's asleep
then grab his hand and take his ring,
put it on your hand, and start to sing
wake him up and accuse him
of not wearing the ring.

Answer 4

Good Job... Nice Poem...

Answer 5

I think you should quick call the plumber.
The poem is really cute!
I'm sorry for laughing :)

Answer 6

load the gun and call the plumber
go ahead and gas up the hummer
if you really need to run
he should ask are you okay
a love should never be
flushed away
specially when you really bought the ring
diamonds really arent everything

Answer 7

it sounds like a baby poem

Answer 8

Holy s......t Batman, I forgot the rope !! Keep your day job !!!

Answer 9

I think that if he hits you , you should call the cops and leave him!

Answer 10

Once again your good