The Hidden Gem
A beautiful piece of art
Just sitting in the dark.
Underneath all that surrounds
Known only to those who have seen it
Even then it is not found,
A gem waiting to be found
By a lucky passer by,
That will be the day
That they will be the luckiest around,
No one has ever found it
Who knows if it will be,
Will time cover it up
Or just blow all the debris away?
Will the finder be so naïve
As to just throw this gem away?
Or will they cherish it forever?
And never let it go.
2007-04-04 05:00:53 · 21 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
i wrote it and im in 8th grade.
2007-04-04 05:01:25 · update #1
I think it is great and you should continue to pursue writing poetry. I read it a couple of times thinking about all of thethings the gem could be... That is what writing is supposed to do: make the reader think!
BTW: Poems are the art of words and rhythm, they don't have to rhyme
2007-04-04 05:05:27 · answer #1 · answered by MorningStar 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like it!
It made me wonder what the gem was...it could be a lot of things. It should really make the reader thing about what "gems" they have found that they aren't cherishing as they should.
Cool poem.
PS. to the above posters- poems don't have to rhyme.
2007-04-04 12:03:57 · answer #2 · answered by Simply_Renee 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
If you're really in 8th grade then yes it's a start but it lacks heart. I don't feel anything from the poem. The best question to ask is where are you in the poem?
2007-04-04 12:14:14 · answer #3 · answered by kristonianinstitution 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I understand the poem as you comparing yourself to a peice of art that has not been discovered yet and you are still waiting for the right person. Its nice but it still need deeper words.
2007-04-04 12:05:31 · answer #4 · answered by David 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I love it, however I'm a little concerned about your love life implications in this and also me reading that your only in the eighth grade. My opinion is you've be to hurt to soon in life and may need to consult with a professional in these regards...Good luck...
2007-04-04 12:41:28 · answer #5 · answered by EW 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Yes it is good--suggestion--after " will time cover it up"| should read " Is it blown away debris?" Read that see if it doesn't rhyme a bit....but it's good!
2007-04-04 12:06:49 · answer #6 · answered by jakkibluu 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Sitll Good
2007-04-04 12:03:40 · answer #7 · answered by ckoottunkal 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's a masterpiece. A great deep meaning hidden in it. Keep up the good work. :)
God bless.
2007-04-04 12:05:33 · answer #8 · answered by Lil Ms. SunShine 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Dn't listen to him. This is a very good poem. I'm in 9th grade.
2007-04-04 12:05:56 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
i thought it was beautiful poem. how could you come up with all of that only being in the eighth grade
2007-04-04 12:04:57 · answer #10 · answered by CHERISH 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋