Could you please help me with English grammar?

Question

I'm learning English as my second language. If there is anyone who can correct my English grammar below, I would be VERY appriciated!!

"In order to make the Non-Smoking law effective, there are several proposals. First, patrols by officers should be taken place. Second, advertisement to promote a good smoking manner also should be mandated to cigarette companies. Bill boards, ads on a subway, TV commercials are considered to be effective. Third, the government should set up smoking spots in a city to protect smoker’s rights. The smoking spots should be built mainly from the income of the cigarette tax."

Answer 1

Actually, for someone who is learning English, you did quite well. Here are my suggestions / corrections:

In order to make non-smoking laws effective, I have several proposals. First, patrols / surveillances by officers should take place. Second, advertisements to promote good smoking etiquette should be mandated to cigarette companies. Billboards, ads on subways, and TV commercials are considered to be effective. Third, the government should set up smoking locations in cities to protect smokers' rights. These smoking areas should be built mainly from the income produced by cigarette taxation.

Answer 2

In order to make the non-smoking law effective there are several proposals. First, patrols by officers should take place. Second, advertisement to promote a good smoking manner should also be mandated to cigarette companies. Bill boards, ads on a subway and TV commercials are all considered to be effective. Third, the government should set up smoking spots in a city to protect smokers' rights. The smoking spots should be built mainly from the income of the cigarette tax.

Answer 3

In order to make the Non-Smoking law effective, there are several proposals. First, patrols by officers should take place. Second, advertisements promoting a good smoking manner should be mandated to cigarette companies. Bill boards, ads on subways and TV commercials are all considered effective. Lastly, the government should set up smoking spots in each city to protect smokers' rights. They should be built mainly from the income of cigarette tax.

Answer 4

There are several proposals in order to make the non-smoking law effective. First, officers should patrol. Second, cigarette companies whould be mandated to promote a good smoking manner. Billboards, ads on subwats, and TV commercials would all be effective. Third, the government should set up smoking spots in a city to protect smokers' rights. These smoking spots should be built using government income generated from cagarette taxes.

This is how it would properly be written, however the message you are trying to portray makes little to no sense to me.

Answer 5

There are several proposals that have been made in order to make the non-smoking laws more effective: firstly, that officers peform routine patrols; secondly, that cigarette companies be mandated to promote compliance with the laws, through billboards, subway ads, TV commercials, etc.; and thirdly, that "smoking spots" be set up in a city to protect smokers' rights. These "smoking spots" should in turn be established through income gained through cigarette tax."

Answer 6

Patrols don't 'take place'. Officers should patrol (name an area).

smoking manner is not really the best way to say it...maybe etiquette is better.

smokers' rights

income from cigarette tax.

Answer 7

To tell you the honest truth, I didn't even read your whole question. However, from what I did read... CONGRATULATIONS! Your English grammar is 1000 times better than the majority of the English-speaking people who will respond.
The sad thing is, I'm being absolutely serious. People these days are ignorant, lazy, and the majority of the people on the internet need to take a trip back to 2nd or 3rd grade. My 2 year-old has better grammar than most of them.

Answer 8

you did great i didn't find any mistakes. but here's a tip when your making a list like " i like fruit,chips,cupcakes" make sure you put the word "and" so people know what your talking about like,"i like fruit, cupcakes, and cupcakes. you don't have to use it every time just giving advice!!