Help with thesis statement?

Question

My whole essay is about Julius Caesar. My essay answer, " how violence can never lead to good morally result."

I have three ideas: plans have unexpected circumstances, family sacrafice themselves for the lives of their members, and how declaring war leads to regret.

My point is, I dont' know how to make it into a suitable thesis. The essay is persuasive.

Answer 1

If your paper is supposed to be about the play, then I would focus on only the first idea, because it is easily backed up with evidence (quotes) from the play.

If you have read "Of Mice and Men", which is often taught in the same grade, you can use that as a hook for your opening paragraph. Like this:

As Steinbeck immortalized, "The best laid plans of mice and men often go awry." This could not be more true for many of Shakespeare's characters including the real-life emporer Julius Caesar. In the play by the same name, the vioelent plans of Ceasar, Cassius, Anthony and Brutus have unexpected outcomes due to the moral implications of their deeds.

Answer 2

Violence never leads to a moral result because of the unexpected circumstances in plans, sacrifices of family members and regrets after war.

Answer 3

You could begin with a quote:

As Lord Acton once said, "Power corrupts, and absolute power corrupts absolutely."

This was true of Caesar, once a good man and a good friend, and also true of Brutus once he achieved power.