loveless
loveless aren't we all?
As this world begains to fall
Sinking down to the bottom
Faceless and forgotten
No one to no our shame
No one to share our shame
My ending was in vain
2007-03-30 07:00:14 · 12 answers · asked by Billie 1 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
thats deep
2007-03-30 07:03:18 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Even though you used the wrong no (know), the was a beautifully sad poem. There is a lot of raw human emotion, it is written sweetly and almost surreal. I love it.
2007-03-30 14:03:59 · answer #2 · answered by PrettyLady26 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Responded
Regards
2007-03-30 14:02:53 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
That was the best darn thing ive ever read.
Fantastic story about tuna fish. It just made my day, thankyou!
2007-03-30 14:02:10 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
This is very sad. I hope this is something you just wrote, and that you don't really feel this way. Things sometimes look bad before getting better, but they will get better!
2007-03-30 14:07:41 · answer #5 · answered by kayboff 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
sounds like u went through a tough time
2007-03-30 14:02:27 · answer #6 · answered by Jayde 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
That's okay, but it needs to have more depth. My rule for writing poetry is: "Show, don't tell." Keep writing!
2007-03-30 14:03:59 · answer #7 · answered by poeticjustice 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
You're pretty good. Work on more then work on getting published.
2007-03-30 16:00:16 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I don't like poetry and that didn't convert me.
2007-03-30 14:02:45 · answer #9 · answered by cigaro19 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Poem or story?
needs more capitals....more punctuation....
2007-03-30 14:03:08 · answer #10 · answered by Its me!!! :) 4 · 2⤊ 0⤋