Criticism on my poem and advice on if I should take a career in writing poetry?

Question

Letting go

Love is hard to leave
Letting go is harder than seems
A sweet gentle is all you might miss
But to someone else it’s heavenly bliss
Letting go doesn’t mean to stop loving
It means to stop hurting

Forgetting is hard to do
A kiss can’t be forgotten
A touch is easy to miss
To love and forget is highly impossible
Letting go doesn’t mean to forget the memories
It means to stop letting them haunt you

There was some spelling mistakes this should be better: Letting go

Love is hard to leave
Letting go is harder than it seems
A sweet gentle touch is all you might miss
But to someone else it’s heavenly bliss
Letting go doesn’t mean to stop loving
It means to stop hurting

Forgetting is hard to do
A kiss can’t be forgotten
A touch is easy to miss
To love and forget is highly impossible
Letting go doesn’t mean to forget the memories
It means to stop letting them haunt you

Answer 1

I think it's nice, but it doesn't quite flow. I think you should continue writing poetry. Everything takes practice. You can decide later if is your career or a hobby. It would help if you read more, try to read something that's considered classics - that expands the vocabulary.

Answer 2

Believe it or not, poetry critics are really into punctuation,
remove all unneccessary words
don't be repetitive.
remove small words that do not affect the grammar.
All beginning poets write about love, addiction, depression or teen angst.
so I would pick something different if you want to be taken serious. It is hurtful, to get critique most of the time,
shorten it up, don't rhyme, don't make full statements.
If you want to be a poet, you need writing assignments. Join a poetry forum where they assign you a subject to write about for the day or a word count, or structure.

Go read the critique at this site. They are top of the line for helping you truthfully. You don't just want to get lied to and have praise for everything you write.Or better yet join them, they will be a good friend.

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Answer 3

Pretty good. Find yoursef a good creative writing program. It is difficult, nearly impossible, to build a career on poetry. You often have to do something else for money and then publish on the side and eventually teach, conference, etc. Margaret Atwood is the only poet I know that has been able to make a living off of poetry.

However, it is a noble road to follow, filled with beauty and injustice. Use your talents to expose those beauties and injustices and you'll be successful.

Answer 4

I don't think Yahoo! Answers is the best place to post your poetry if you want honest critiques. If I were you, I'd find a poetry-oriented website or community where you could get more detailed, less flattering reviews.

As for what I think about your poem, I think while you seem to have a good command of language, the poem itself is pretty bland and doesn't really stand out from thousands of teenage sappy love poems in any way. Obviously, this is only my opinion, and my opinion is in no way a universal truth.

Answer 5

I like it and it's pretty good, but I definately would advise against choosing a career in writing poetry, unless you are fully dedicated in every way and know that it is your unquestionable calling. It is EXTREMELY difficult to support yourself just by writing poetry, and even though your poem was good it wasn't the spectacularily incredible that you need to live off of as a career, and even then it can be hard. I would advise you write whenever you have time for fun, as a side hobby, but don't let your future depend on it. If you practice enough, just by scribbling down anything that comes to mind (I suggest a writer's notebook), you will become really good and enjoy it in your spare time. You're on your way!

Answer 6

BMSOGIRL,

Your poem was lovely, heartfelt and honest.

But you do not spell well and your syntax and grammar are poor. If it is because you are very young and still uneducated then it is forgivable until you get educated.

As it stands, saying "There WAS some spelling mistakes this should be better", makes us think that perhaps English is not your native tongue or you are still in elementary school.

And the last line of your poem
is awful. The two words "to stop" are redundant. All you needed to say was:

"It means not letting them haunt you"

But never mind the criticism. Here is my advice?

"Do whatever makes your heart sing !"

Answer 7

I don't really like this poem because it seems scatter-brained and has poor vocabulary. It's extremely cliche and the repetition is not used very well. Your word choice also causes the rhythm to come off beat. As for your life as a poet, I would suggest that you take a while to review famous poets. You will realize that some of the most genius poets write about the issues of the current times.

Answer 8

I first like to tell you that all those rules you have ever been told about writing poetry are not something you want to base your writing on. There is no specific way to write. The poem is tasteful. But do not forget that there is a whole world of things to write about and not just love or heartaches.

Answer 9

i think you are a great poet who cares what people think that poem was very very AWESOME don't let other people get in your way i think you should definitely get a career as a poet