A Silent Perspective
Everywhere.
Silence.
I cannot hear the echo of my own footsteps along the pavement;
The sound is foreign to my ears, but it is
Familiar to others.
The crowd surges toward me,
Engulfing my tiny frame in its ambiance.
I force a smile to disguise the pain in my heart.
Mouths are slightly open, laughter
Escaping through parted lips.
Silent laughter.
I can only hear with my eyes.
I gaze upon an unknown countenance and
Imagine the sound of a voice, what it is to have a
Voice.
My voice is a series of hand signals few of which can
Comprehend.
I envy those who are normal.
I am tormented by my handicap, though I compel myself to
Live through it.
I look in the mirror, and I witness a monster.
I perceive myself the way everyone else sees me.
Society’s misinterpretation of my world is the cause,
My pitiful self-reflection, the effect.
I cannot conceive of placing myself into your shoes until
You recognize what it is to be deaf, what it is to live
A silent perspective.
2007-03-28 15:21:30 · 12 answers · asked by alyssa M 2 in Education & Reference ➔ Homework Help
I really liked it! One suggestion:
"My voice is a series of hand signals few of which can Comprehend" reads better to me as:
"My voice is a series of hand signals which few can
Comprehend"
Thank. This speaks to me. Is this a personal experience or an identification with the impairment?.
2007-03-28 15:46:52 · answer #1 · answered by DrB 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
If it's original, it's nice, sad. Poetry is not my forte, but I would give it an A.
It does remind me of some lyrics by Bob Dylan though I do not know the melody.
Because I hear does not mean I listen. Because I listen does not mean I hear. These things that make us human also make us monsters. Perhaps your perception of normal is indeed a misinterpretation.
I do hope these are words for an assignment and not words from the heart...as poetry usually is.
2007-03-28 16:20:26 · answer #2 · answered by 1nextdoor 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very nice poem :).I love me some write too, and you're good.I think the poem is talking about how you have a point of view,but you keep it underneath it.You are feeling a lot of pain but you want to have an image that you're happy for everyone.So is silent perspective because you have another life/feelings within you, but you choose to keep them hidden.Am I close?
2007-03-28 15:26:38 · answer #3 · answered by Marla 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
This is more prose than poetry. It is composed of what seems to be random but related thoughts in succession to
express your feelings. The organization of thoughts is very
good, and delivery is also good, but it doesn't fit any accepted
form of poetry. So, yes, it's good---as prose! Sorry, but you
didn't write poetry, just an organized series of heart-felt and
emotional thoughts.
2007-03-28 15:43:56 · answer #4 · answered by SlownEasy 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I answered the other question too, but anyway I think it is really good. Don't listen to those people that comment badly about the poem, because you include so many great ideas in that poem that not very many people have the talent to do. You should be proud of yourself!
2007-03-28 15:33:55 · answer #5 · answered by hanalulu2☺♥☻ 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
This is really good... You'd better get a good grade on this, or I'll be kicking a certain teacher's butt!
^_^
2007-03-28 15:25:48 · answer #6 · answered by Flappy 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I think it is a very nice poem! It is very descriptive!
2007-03-28 15:31:53 · answer #7 · answered by billiejoe_2005 1 · 1⤊ 0⤋
It sucks. Sign up for wood shop.
2007-03-28 15:24:51 · answer #8 · answered by squeezie_1999 7 · 0⤊ 3⤋
You asked...
It sounds juvenile and whiny.
2007-03-28 15:27:13 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
not too shabby..do you write alot id like to read more.....
2007-03-28 15:27:05 · answer #10 · answered by pinksolveseverything 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋