what do I need to add to my paragraph about my personal long term goal?

Question

My personal long term goal is to save money for travelling the world. I will do this by getting a permanent job. When I am working at my permanent job, when I get paid I will save ten percent of it, into my savings account, for each time that I get paid, so that I have enough money to travel to a different location of the world when I am allowed to.

Answer 1

How about you plan to learn about several different cultures so that you may enjoy your travels. It's easier to fit in (even if you're an outsider) if you know something about the culture.