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If there is some mistakes and not organized well I would be very appreciative if you correct them and share with more ideas .

First of all,Americans place great importance on the need for privacy. However Iranians do not . Americans usually enjoy spending time alone. It keeps them in touch with themselves. Besides that, they have their own possessions. You can expect that they would construct a set of regulations and rules to protect their privacy and to ensure that certain information will remain unknown.

2007-03-28 15:10:05 · 1 answers · asked by Anonymous in Education & Reference Higher Education (University +)

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The following is my edit of your short essay.

Americans place great importance on the need for privacy, but Iranians do not . Americans usually enjoy spending time alone because it keeps them in touch with themselves. People should expect that they would construct a set of regulations and rules to protect their privacy and to ensure that certain information will remain guarded.

The above essay seems disjointed, having privacy as the theme to express. How do you know that Iranians place no importance on their privacy? If you have a source documenting that information then you ought to include it.

I deleted the sentence, "Besides that, they have their own possessions" because it adds nothing to the essay.

2007-03-28 15:25:51 · answer #1 · answered by Guitarpicker 7 · 0 0

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