Dare to walk the path that is uniquely paved by you
Rejecting the criticism for being yourself
Because selling out was never an option
The right way is rarely the easy way
Yet its plunder is unfathomable
Who can light a match to those
Who go all the way
No matter what the cost
As long as it is right
Setting fame aside
And riches and favor
For true character and virtue
Staring into the eyes of fear
With courage and peace
Knowing that even death
Can’t steal the mark you have made on the world
2007-03-27 19:26:10 · 7 answers · asked by Cindy 1 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
What really is one to do with people who think they're poets and haven't a prayer of coming close to poetry? Sometimes I have tried to help -- I don't know if my trying did help. Other times, as here, there is no way to help.
I hate hurting people's feelings, and those who write what they think are poems are most vulnerable, and probably fine people whom I would like in every other respect.
I can't keep from clicking on "my poem" threads, as one may someday turn up something with real promise. In the meanwhile, what am I to be: soothingly false, or nastily honest?
2007-03-27 23:09:56 · answer #1 · answered by obelix 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Seems a little vague. Can you be more...unambiguous? I need to understand the relationship between the speaker and the spoken to. Rhythm is prosaic and you could use some braver line breaks to really jack up the energy and the tension in some of this.
2007-03-30 21:04:29 · answer #2 · answered by Nathan D 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
:D Good poem with lots of feeling. I like how it flows and the message behind it. Stay strong in what you belive and know is right. We need that message to be sent out to our youth, especially right now. This is a magnificent thought provoking poem. You should have it published!
Good luck and God bless you
K.K.
2007-03-27 19:31:31 · answer #3 · answered by Kurious_Kat 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Most of the poems people put on yahoo answers and ask for an opinion of... really suck! I've read many of them. So dark and have no viable message.
BUT I LIKE YOUR POEM! You really communicate the highs and lows of being a real artist. Good Job!
2007-03-27 19:35:29 · answer #4 · answered by backpackwayne 5 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Nicely done - from the heart and poetically sound. Your flow is good and the uneven stanzas works. The imagry is beautiful. I would rate this one an 8 1/2. Keep writing - Pax - C.
2007-03-27 20:51:32 · answer #5 · answered by Persiphone_Hellecat 7 · 0⤊ 2⤋
yes,it's gud!
2007-03-27 20:24:37 · answer #6 · answered by cutesweetyangel 2 · 0⤊ 1⤋
this is good.thoughts too.
2007-03-27 20:27:19 · answer #7 · answered by uncoolmom 5 · 0⤊ 1⤋