Can you please give me your opinions on this Limerick?

Question

Here's what I came up with:

There was once a man from Spain
He was always in pain
He was occasionally in fights
They basically started at night
That poor man from Spain

Answer 1

I actually think its a good limerick, but most limericks are supposed to have a certain rhythym to it. Read the limerick below, and see if you get what I'm saying:

There once was a man from Peru
Who dreamed he was eating his shoe
He woke with a fright
In the middle of the night,
To find that his dream had come true

The rhyme scheme of a limerick is a, b, c, c, a, and usually you don't want to repeat a word instead of rhyming. Maybe your limerick could go more like this:

There once was a man from Spain
Unfortunately, he was always in pain
He was occasionally involved in fights
That usually started during the nights
Oh that poor, poor man from Spain

It may sound like I was being overly critical, but I really do like your limerick; it takes a lot of creativity to make one.

Ps-I got that example limerick from spongebob! lmao!!!

I hope this helps!!! =)

Answer 2

Doesn't flow like a limerick should.