Is this a good thesis for a 10th grade reserch paper on Coco Chanel and her impact on society in the 1920's?
Not only did Gabrielle Coco Chanel reach great heights in an industry where only men were known to succeed but she also embodied an independent and influential woman who revolutionized fashion and trends for the newly liberated women of the roaring twenties.
Please be critical and make some suggestions! Thanks :)
2007-03-27 10:06:49 · 4 answers · asked by Cavs in '09 ♥ Hurry Back BEN 6 in Education & Reference ➔ Homework Help
Down to picky, picky:
Is Coco her nickname?--then say, Gabrielle "Coco" Chanel
men were known--make it men had been known
leave out "and trends"--makes it stronger
newly-liberated
Roaring Twenties
2007-03-27 10:14:49 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Hi,SmartyPants! Your thesis ,honestly, reads like a short newspaper item, even...a scantily written one.
In your finished work,be sure to have answered ,The Five "W"s and the "H".
WHO ?
WHAT ?
WHEN ?
WHERE ?
WHY ?
HOW ?
Collect,and assemble the facts,and be able to list your sources, or substantiate any quotes you use from others for your thesis.
I concur with an earlier offerred answer ,in that,you need to watch your use ,(ommittance) of punctuation where it is called for,and check your spelling.
Webster's Desk Edition dictionary has a whole section on where to use every type of punctuation,for any situation, in the back pages of it.
Remember,in everything you write,whether handwritten, or, typed, "If no one can read it, or understand your meaning, then you may as well not even bother to write it.
Good luck,Sis,let us know how you do with it !
2007-03-27 11:03:09 · answer #2 · answered by STORMY 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think that you need to put more periods in your paragraph, it's like a run-on sentence. Other than that I think that it is great.
2007-03-27 10:16:00 · answer #3 · answered by keon_artis 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
when is the next fashion show we would like to see it.
2007-03-27 10:11:52 · answer #4 · answered by ? 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋