what are the errors in my English?

Question

Please what are my errors on these sentences:

1.Michael's palm is cold and it’s sweating. His legs felt numb and that makes him unable to run

2.His body shivers but his joints can’t move.

3.She saw Chuckie is holding a knife and it’s pointing to her.

4.She gave him an emotionless frozen look by making an evil smile.

5., A rugs to riches and ugly duckling fairytale is not enough for me.

Answer 1

This is how the sentences should be written:
1. Michael's palm is cold and it's sweating. His legs feel numb and that feeling makes him unable to run.

2. His body shivers but his joints won't move.

3. She saw Chuckie holding a knife pointing at her.

4. She gave him a frozen, emotionless look by making an evil smile.

5. A rugs to riches ugly duckling fairytale is not enough for me.

Answer 2

1. Michael's palm is cold and sweating. His legs feel numb, making him unable to run. (Tense used is the same throughout.)
2. His body shivers, but his joints cannot move.
3. She saw Chuckie holding a knife, pointing at her.
4. She gave him an emotionless, frozen look, by an evil smile.
(Here, if evil smile shows an emotion, then 'emotionless'
may not be an appropriate word.)
5. 'Rags to Riches' and 'Ugly Duckling' fairly tales are not enough for me.

Answer 3

1. Michael's palm is cold, and it's sweating;his legs felt numb, and that makes him unable to run.
(2) His body shivers, but his joints can't move.
(3) She saw Chuckie is holding a knife, and it's pointing to her. ("at" would be better phrasing in place of "to").
(4) She gave him an emotionless frozen look, by making an evil smile.
(5) A "rags-(instead of "rugs") to-riches" and "ugly duckling" fairytale is not enough for me.

Answer 4

1.Michael's palm is cold (Present tense)
and it’s sweating. (Present tense)
His legs felt numb and that makes him unable to run (Past tense)
1.Michael's palm "was" cold and "was" sweating. His legs felt numb and that made him unable to run

2.His body shivers but his joints can’t move. OK

3.She saw Chuckie (Past tense)
is holding a knife and it’s pointing to her. (Present tense)

3.She saw :that" Chuckie "was" holding a knife and "it was pointed at" her.

4.She gave him an emotionless"," frozen look by making an evil smile. Use a Comma

5., A rugs to riches and ugly duckling fairytale is not enough for me.

5., A "rags" to riches and "an" ugly duckling fairytale "are" not enough for me

Answer 5

It's just basic problems with your past/ present and future tense.

In your first sentence, ".Michael's palm is cold and it’s sweating. His legs felt numb and that makes him unable to run", the best part of it is in the present but when you talk about his legs that makes it sound like something that already happened as opposed to something that is happening now. "His legs feel numb" would be better

Number two is fine though a comma directly after "shivers" is required.

Number three is again a similar problem to the first. "She saw" indicates this happened a while ago while the idea that "Chuckie IS holding a knife" suggests it's happening now. "She saw Chuckie was holding a knife and it was pointing to her" would be better if this happened in the past or "She sees Chuckie is holding a knife and it's pointing to her!" if it's happening now. An exclamation mark could add dramatic tension.

Number four is fine.

In number five the term you are looking for is "rags to riches" not "rugs"

Hope that helps brah!

Answer 6

Sentence 1 is not parallel. You use the contraction "it's" in place of "it is." In the next sentence you use the word "felt." "Is" is a present tense verb and "felt" is a past tense verb. You should use the same tenses in these sentences. Also in sentence 1, try saying, "Michael's palm is cold and sweaty."

If these are all sentences of the same paragraph, they should all be parallel to each other. You are going back and forth between past and present tense verbs.

In sentence 5, the expression is "rags to riches" not rugs. I'd reword the sentence. I don't think "is" is the correct verb in the sentence. I think "are" is more correct but I'd just reword the sentence.