What do you think of this poem, "Autumn"?

Question

Autumn
As I look around me, all I can see
Is mother nature smiling back at me
Leaves turning shades of red, brown, and yellow
Slowly drifting to the ground
Calm and mellow
Autumn air starts to get colder
And colder it will get
Soon winter will come
Icy and Wet
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So what do you think? Please be truthful and don't be afraid to say that you hate it! I just want feedback. Do you think its good enough to maybe get in a newspaper/magazine? Please be 100% truthful!
~*thanks

please look at my other poem, "winter" here. http://answers.yahoo.com/question/index?qid=20070326202242AArZwzv&r=w

Answer 1

I feel the description of winter was very brash. "Cold and Wet." Perhaps use words that contrast with the feeling that autumn gives you. An example of something that stirs nostalgia in me about Autumn, is the smokey bonfire scent. The rhyme scheme is a little trite...

I think you have a great concept, but the diction needs tweaking, and some more expansion that will give more insight about what autumn makes you feel. If you are able to expand and make it more insightful, I believe this one could be published.