I need some help and if you can please help me rephrase the following?

Question

A Physical description............................

He was a huge man that stood below medium height, his build is average, with a nice set of shoulders, although he had a rather large head he seemed to be in pretty good condition. He has grey hair and a boney nose. He also has beady eyes that has a coldness to it. He has a moustache that appears to be tobacco stained. YUCK!


your help is appreciated .

I really need some help I know it does not make any sense I was hoping maybe we can make sense out of the little write up we can delete huge.

Answer 1

I was repulsed at the sight of him, for although he was of average height, he was an imposing figure of a man, broad shouldered and heavily muscled. His cold beady eyes stared out from his massive skull covered in wiry grey hair, over his angular features and tobacco stained moustache.

Answer 2

Despite being less than average in height he was a rather big man with broad shoulders and a head which was somewhat large and out of proportion with the rest of his body. Although his grey hair, boney nose, cold, beady eyes and grotesque tobacco stained mustache left no doubt of his old age he was in remarkably great physical condition.

Answer 3

He was a huge man. He stood below medium height, his build was average, and he had a nice pair of shoulders, although he had a rather large head. He also had grey hair, a bony nose, cold beady eyes, and a moustache that appears to be tobacco-stained. YUCK!

Answer 4

He was a man of odd structure, although at first glance he seemed to be of average build. Upon looking again, he was tall enough but short for his width. He had a broad set of shoulders that could offset even the most aggressive footballs players. His head was large but not abnormally large and his boney nose seemed tiny in comparison to the canvas his face created. His grey hair was a few shades lighter than his tabacco stained moustache and his beady little eyes peered inbetween them with enough coldness to freeze the beaches of Florida.

Answer 5

The guy was well-proportioned, but just average in height and build. His head was sort of big but you didn't notice it much because of his grey hair, boney nose, and cold beady eyes.
Even those were dwarfed though, for all you really noticed was his tobacco-stained, thick, sticky, moustache. He could have been just an average slightly ugly dude, but that moustache just made him repulsive and revolting. Hardly anyone could get beyond its nastiness long enough to get to know him.

Answer 6

I started to do so, but ran into problems--how can a man be huge but also only be below medium height and with an average build?

Answer 7

Don't start every sentence with "He"...Name him (if you can, or say "the man") in the first sentence, then use "His" grey hair.... (blend that sentence into the next, beady eyes).

Hope this helps. Good luck!!

Answer 8

It makes no sense. You say he's huge and then you say he's average build. You also say he's short. It makes no sense. Also, you have to use better descriptors than pretty good condition.

Answer 9

he is an old, heavy smoker obese cretin