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there was this little girl
who cried enough to drown the whole world
she always was crying and almost never smiled
and when she did it never sticked around for a while



what is a good ending for this poem?

2007-03-26 14:19:19 · 7 answers · asked by jtkrbsnb 1 in Arts & Humanities Books & Authors

Oh, you can change the poem around a little bit 2.

2007-03-26 14:19:42 · update #1

7 answers

But when it did -
She was a cute little kid.

Pax - C.

PS - Sticked may not be a word but in this case it works - little kids talk like that.

2007-03-26 14:26:05 · answer #1 · answered by Persiphone_Hellecat 7 · 0 0

sturdy sufficient. call advice: motives unknown. suggestions for the poem... you have have been given a lot of physically powerful photos actual right here... yet I would desire to be undemanding and say that the rhymes, which will properly be oftentimes rather forced, fairly distract from what you say. there are countless kinds a poem can take, in case you prefer style poetry, and now no longer all of them rhyme, or they rhyme in extra versatile strategies. analyze some kinds on line perhaps, or verify out "the ebook of style". there is likewise loose verse, which might paintings effectively for what you're doing right here. which you may use rhyme although are not as limited as you would be with direct rhyming. that is going to additionally enable you to lose a number of the filler words and words. if youin case you wanted, you may strip this actual right down to the bare snap pictures. No motives. no extra desirable than you fairly somewhat prefer. that is not any longer user-friendly even though it fairly is a possibility and additionally you may exchange into with an somewhat sturdy poem, as you stated your self. stunning sturdy fortune!

2016-12-08 12:03:31 · answer #2 · answered by ? 4 · 0 0

"Sticked" is not a word, for heaven's sake. "Stuck" is the correct word.

There was a little girl
Who cried to drown the world
She cried and her lonely smile
Didn't last any sort of a while

Try that.

2007-03-26 14:25:10 · answer #3 · answered by Nightlight 6 · 0 0

this sadness was her sort of style
she never said why only grimaced in pain
seeing her this way drove me insane
i couldn't help in any way
she would forever remain the same
the happiest moment of her pitiful life
was leaving this world with a smile and no strife (or just knife)
in the corner with her little tears
i will always remember for years and years

2007-03-26 15:51:29 · answer #4 · answered by lyra 3 · 0 0

the little girl,
with so many tears
they could drown the whole world.
a smile never crossed her face
for so many years.....

i dont no....good luck

2007-03-26 14:25:27 · answer #5 · answered by karen 5 · 0 0

Start again from the beginning!

2007-03-26 23:26:36 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0 0

so she carried her tears in a smiley-face bucket.

2007-03-26 14:42:41 · answer #7 · answered by BooBooKins 5 · 0 0

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