What can i add to this poem to make it better?

Question

When I look outside, there I see by
Flowers, birds and buzzing bees
Beautiful blue sky
And clouds passing
Lush of greens and big tall trees

Answer 1

You've described what you see; how about adding some lines about how it makes you feel?

Answer 2

When I look outside with my big brown eyes (or w/e color eyes u have),
there I see in the damp green grass,
Flowers, birds and buzzing bees
Beautiful blue sky up above
And a few clouds passing by
Lush of greens and big tall trees with some bunnies running near
and i think oh what a beautiful sight running through my mind

Answer 3

Add the buzzing bees to a different section describing the sounds you HEAR when you GO outside. You can also make it more interesting by adding a TOUCH section, describing various textures of nature and the sensations you FEEL.

Answer 4

Instead of saying "beautiful blue sky" and "clouds passing," describe it another way: like, "eager white knights leaning into the blue damsel sky" -- or anything that can be compared to clouds and sky. Be creative!

Answer 5

If I see the reflections of the same
When I see " inside "
Life will be beautiful as well as wonderful .

Answer 6

And the daffodils dancing,