" The USSR was established in 1922 with 4 republics, and eventually, by 1956, the USSR was a confederation that consisted of 15 union republics. These union republics were dominated in Moscow, Russia by one political Communist dictatorship, the Russian Soviet Federated Socialist Republic (RSFSR), which made up one of the 15 republics in the Soviet Union. "
Do these 2 sentences sound good? Advice... thanks.
2007-03-26 10:58:55 · 3 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ History
"The USSR was established in 1922 with four republics; by 1956 the USSR was a confederation with 15 union republics."
I would reword as such. Your second sentence I don't understand. It seems incoherent to me. Seems like you made a comma splice error, but I don't know much on your topic so I can't rework it.
2007-03-26 11:05:05 · answer #1 · answered by tennisguru58 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Take "eventually" out of there: "...4 republics, and by 1956,..."
2007-03-26 18:07:00 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
They sound ok, the second sentence is a little too extensive
2007-03-26 18:02:34 · answer #3 · answered by DesiGirl 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋