I had to write a poem for English...thoughts?

Question

The poem had to be based off of JOHN LENON'S IMAGINE
I AM FOURTEEN!
Here is my poem:


Imagine a place
Where there is no sun
Where there is no light
Where there is no dark
Close your eyes
And open your mind


Imagine a place
Where there is no gender
Where there is no names
Where there is no identities
Close your eyes
And open your mind

Imagine a place
Where there is no colors
Where there is no thoughts
Where there is no feelings
Close your eyes
And open your mind

Imagine a place
Where there is no measurements
Where there is no species
Where there is no language
Close your eyes
And open your mind

Imagine a place
Where there is peace
Where there is equality
Where there is acceptance
But of course
You’ll close your eyes
And block out your mind

The poem had to be a list poem meaning that it has to repeat over and over....=]

becuase thats what John Lennons does.

Answer 1

the poem is very good, but I am not sure if grammar is a issue with the poem, but a lot of the sentences need to be "are" instead of is

Where there are no names
Where there are no identities
Where there are no colors
Where there are no thoughts
Where there are no measurements
Where there are no species

Answer 2

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Answer 3

As soon as I realized the rest of your stanzas were basically going to be repeated, I lost total interest. Repetition is good for using effect, but the trick is to use it creatively, not just "imagine a place...imagine a place....imagine a place..." It gets very old after awhile.

I did like your concept, however. And don't take this too personally--poems are tricky things. :]

Answer 4

It's based on another poem? That takes all the greatness out of it... I was thinking we had the next Sylvia Plath on our hands (not the going crazy part), until I saw you were copying the poem's form and meaning.

Answer 5

There were some grammatical errors, but other than that...

I love Lennon, and I loved your poem. You're really lucky, your English class is actually interesting.... We never do anything but read and take vocab tests in my English class.....

Answer 6

firstly... i'd like to say, this is amazingly amazing.
awesomeness fo sho.
but... in the english language, using proper grammer, you should us "aren't any or aren't or isn't" instead of "is no".
your english teacher will take points off.
i'm 14yrs. as well &&& i've been writing for a long time.
&&& i must say out of all the writings of read lately this is my favorite.
other than that... its wonderful.
&&& based off of a pretty amazing song.
have a killer day.

Answer 7

i enjoyed the concept and the message! I think it is a great poem!

Answer 8

Great poem! Hope you get good grade.

Answer 9

I like the poem as well as its' message. Turn it in.

Answer 10

i like it! there were a few grammatical errors but otherwise it's good. don't know what john lennon's imagine is like so can't compare...