Like me, the candle burns.
Filled with a spirit that is free -
But free only in the mind,
For the spirit is caged
With walls of wax.
2007-03-24 23:47:38 · 11 answers · asked by Elchrys 1 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
wow
this is really good
short, but some of the best poems are short
is there a hidden underlinning message or no?
2007-03-26 10:46:44 · answer #1 · answered by Eric the Red 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
well, you burn like a candle and is full of free spirit. But alas this spirit spirit of the mind is locked in within walls as if by bees-wax.
Good poem but make the spirit be likened to a burning candle rather than the other way round.
2007-03-25 07:11:39 · answer #2 · answered by ari-pup 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
The poem is written really well. I would give it an "A+" if I were a high school English teacher... I'm not though, and I know little about writing good poetry, but I enjoyed it!
2007-03-25 07:01:38 · answer #3 · answered by Nathan 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like the first 2 lines ... the 4th line is contradictory to the nearly-just-stated 2nd line ... could use more clarification / expansion on this ... sounds a bit depressing.
2007-03-25 07:01:59 · answer #4 · answered by sandorgr8 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I understand it.It's very deep and dark revealing a part of you.Good work so keep it up.
2007-03-25 07:03:58 · answer #5 · answered by honeypot0214 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
the mind and spirit are one. the poet is born. your were not born.
2007-03-25 06:56:28 · answer #6 · answered by Jrahdel 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
it's not bad
but i prefer something more perfect like Edmund Spenser.
2007-03-25 06:52:34 · answer #7 · answered by dima 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
it is a good poem.... keep it up and you never know one day you might me famous x
2007-03-25 06:54:58 · answer #8 · answered by mags_brfc 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i think it good i think if you keep practicing and working on writing them youll get better though
2007-03-25 06:51:31 · answer #9 · answered by bik_ko 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Not a lot!
2007-03-25 06:52:02 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋