Did I tell you how it feels
When you walk inside my dreams?
Or the way it makes my heart jump
When I see the way you smile?
You look at me and in that look
Everything is right.
But I know what waits instore for me,
The time when I wake up.
You'll be far away then,
In a non-existant land.
A beautiful place called dreamland;
Where I know it's me you love.
2007-03-24 16:27:14 · 8 answers · asked by ? 1 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
I don't like its subject but it has a flow to it.
2007-03-24 16:32:59 · answer #1 · answered by sean e 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Hey, I really like your poem. It has a lovely flow and rhythm to it. I love the image of walking "inside my dreams". And then, I don't know if you meant this or not, but the "everything is right" line is short and I wondered if that meant that everything is not really right, only in dreams. ??
Don't listen to those other answers, those people obviously know nothing about poetry. [edit] not all the answers I mean the stupid "sucks cocks" ones.
2007-03-25 06:45:54 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
ehh its ok. I still like my poems alot better. You can go to www.quizilla.com and there is a whole bunch of poems that are really good
2007-03-24 23:36:49 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
nice.
check out poetry.com
you can submit and copyright your work there.
If they like it, they will publish it in a book--costs about $50 to buy, but it is great for bragging rights. My hubby has been published more than once.
2007-03-24 23:31:32 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 2⤋
I like it. Shows a lot of emotion. Good job.
2007-03-24 23:30:40 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 1⤋
It is sad and I think you are probably pretty young but you should keep writing.
2007-03-24 23:35:27 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
Lovely poem! you have talent!
2007-03-24 23:35:01 · answer #7 · answered by snapdragon747 5 · 1⤊ 1⤋
i love your poem.
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2007-03-24 23:47:34 · answer #8 · answered by small fri 2 · 0⤊ 1⤋