plz..... proof read it for me....plz help my paper is due in 2 hours?

Question

We always trust the stereotypes that are set in society for people of different race and judge them accordingly, but we never think of the person’s feeling that is being hurt by our prejudices. If everyone in this world has respect for one another, we would live in peace and be able to let others believe in what they wish, and accept that everyone is different. I believe that parents should teach their children right from wrong in our world and raise them in an environment that is centered on acceptance of different ways of life and cultures of people. If we all teach our children and change our ways of thinking, sometime in our future we will be closer to accepting that a man’s character is based upon his soul, not his religion, appearance, gender, ethnicity , or color of the skin

Plz check sentence structure...I feel have sentence of children should teach right from wrong in not sounding correct....so plz change if possible..I want last paragraph to be very attractive but can'

but can't think because of panic.........plz help me

Answer 1

We always trust the stereotypes that are set in society for people of different races and judge them accordingly, but we never think of the person’s feeling that is being hurt by our prejudices. If everyone in this world has respect for one another, we would live in peace and be able to let others believe in what they wish, and accept that everyone is different. I believe that parents should teach their children right from wrong and raise them in an environment that is centered on acceptance of different ways of life and cultures of people. If we teach our children and change our way of thinking, sometime in our future we will be closer to accepting that a man’s character is based upon his soul, not his religion, appearance, gender, ethnicity, or color of skin.

Answer 2

We always trust the stereotypes that are set in society for people of different race and judge them accordingly, but we never think of the person’s feeling *(we are hurting ) by our prejudices *(thoughts and actions). If everyone in this world *(had) respect for one another, *(then) we would live in peace and be able to let others believe in what they wish(.) *(By accepting) that everyone is different *(we give ourself a chance to open our hearts and really get to know the person for who they are and not just what they look like).

I believe that parents *(have the responsiblity to) teach their children right from wrong in our world and raise them in an environment that is centered on acceptance the *(differences of individual and their culture of choice). If we all teach our children *(about differnent cultures and that it is okay to all be different and we all have a right to our own beliefs then) we will be closer to accepting that a *(persons) character is based upon *(who they are as an idividual), not *(because of their) religion, appearance, gender, ethnicity , or color of the skin.

I put stars by what I thought might sound a little better. Good luck. Hope you get a good grade on it.

Answer 3

I;ve put numbers next to questionable items in the copy of your paragraph below. The explanations of each number follows below that.

We always trust the stereotypes that are set in society for people of different race(1) and judge them accordingly, but we never think of the person's feeling(2) that is being hurt by our prejudices. If everyone in this world has(3) respect for (4)one another, we would live in peace(1) and be able to let others believe in what they wish,(4) and accept that everyone is different. I believe that parents should teach their children right from wrong in our world(1) and raise them in an environment that is centered on acceptance of different ways of life(1) and cultures of people. If we all teach our children (6)and change our ways of thinking, sometime in our future we will be closer to accepting that a man’s character is based upon his soul, not his religion, appearance, gender, ethnicity , or color of the skin.

(1) Everytime you use a connective like AND, or BUT you need a comma.
(2) "person's feeling" could be changed to person as it is slightly redundant to then refer to "being hurt."
(3) I would have used HAD instead of HAS in the 2nd sentence.
(4) In the sentence "If everyone in this world has respect for one another..." ONE is not usually used with a pronoun. It would be better to use "each other" instead.
(5) This sentence rambles on. It might be better to split it at "and accept that everyone is different" to read "We need to accept that everyone is different."

Answer 4

We always trust the stereotypes that are set in society for people of different race and judge them accordingly, but we never think of the person’s feeling that is being hurt by our prejudices. If everyone in this world has respect for one another, we would live in peace and be able to let others believe in what they wish, and accept that everyone is different. I believe that parents should teach their children right from wrong in our world and raise them in an environment that is centered on acceptance of different ways of life and cultures of people. If we all teach our children and change our ways of thinking, sometime in our future we will be closer to accepting that a man’s character is based upon his soul, not his religion, appearance, gender, ethnicity , or color of the skin

We always trust the stereotypes that society sets for people of a different race and judge them accordingly, but we never think of the person’s feeling that is being hurt by our prejudices. If everyone in this world had respect for one another, we would be able to live in peace, to let others believe in what they wish, and to accept that everyone is different. I believe that parents should teach their children right from wrong in our world and raise them in an environment that is centered on acceptance of different ways of life and the cultures of others. If we all teach our children and change our way of thinking, we will become closer to accepting that a man’s character is based upon his soul, not his religion, appearance, gender, ethnicity, or the color of his* skin.

*His is technically correct English, but depending on your teacher you may wish to put either “his or her” or some other variation.

Answer 5

How very naïve of you…unfortunately “right and wrong” are so subjective that this will never take place. As for the structure, here is my suggested revision, it removed most of your logical fallacies, cleans up run-ons and changes some of your ambiguous wording. Also be aware that “prejudice” is OK (it simply means to “pre-judge” as in, I won’t like tuna casserole; it happens in the mind. Discrimination is the action associated with prejudice – it’s the bad thing – the one we need to get rid of.


Stereotypes are a dangerous thing as so many people trust them; different races and religions are judged according to what are often false categorizations, and individual feelings are not considered and are often hurt. If everyone in this world had respect for one another’s differences, then we could live in peace and be able to let others believe in what they wish. I believe that parents should teach their children right from wrong in our world and raise them in an environment that is centered on acceptance of different ways of life and cultures of people. If we all teach our children and change our ways of thinking, sometime in our future we will be closer to accepting that a man’s character is based upon his soul, not his religion, appearance, gender, ethnicity , or color of the skin

How about this instead:

Stereotypes are a dangerous thing as so many people trust them; different races and religions are judged according to what are often false categorizations, and individual feelings are not considered and are often hurt. If everyone in this world had respect for one another’s differences, and could agree to leave each other alone to live as they wish, then the world would be a more peaceful place. Parents should teach their children to be peaceful and acceptant of other’s differences and to not fall victim to believing that stereotypes apply to all people. This way, every person’s characters will be based on the soul, not religion, appearance, gender, ethnicity, or skin color.

Answer 6

How about this...

I believe that children should be taught to be more understanding of the world we live in, what behaviour is appropriate and what isn't. They should be raised in an environment that is centered on acceptance of different ways of life and the cultures of people worldwide.

Really great work, but I do agree the wording isn't quite right...

Answer 7

1) First line: People of different races.
2) Pejudice, not prejudices
The sentence with the children, here's how to make it better: I believe that if parents teach their children the difference between right and wrong, we would all be able to live in an enviroment that accepts people from different cultures and backgrounds.

I hope this helps.

Answer 8

its totally perfect
but if u want
u can do something that is called "opening horizons"
it means that u can add a question in the end which
is related to the subject u r talking about
(u discuss a subject then open hirozons to a new one related to the previous)
for example:...But here lies the mystery beneth this question:
can the whole world achieve this prespective?or will it fail in some its societies?

u can change the question if u want ....
but it is a really nice way of ending ur writings

it was really nice
good luck

Answer 9

It's really good. I don't find anything wrong with it. I edit papers in school all the time. It could be an argument. Just separate them in to paragraphs if you haven't already and if you add something maybe you can post it up before it's due.

Hope I helped!

Answer 10

Actually, I really like it. It's fine the way it is unless you want to get really deep. That's going to take up some more time, and "sometime" should be "some time" in the last sentence. Good luck. Awesome work.