Grammar help?

Question

Do I have mistakes in grammar on this paragraph?

Those who remained the same can be easily recognized. Those who are changed have stolen the show. The wineglasses are glimmered better than the chandeliers on the ceiling. Hundreds of alumni were there to reunite with friends, while others came to make their enemies jealous. There is a story behind every person who graduated from that batch. Typical highschool stories about different social cliques brought back some bittersweet memories. The majority has evolved. The campus chick that once has the guys drooling had turned into a voluptuous and unattractive house wife. The Jock who was the king of the varsity is now a nerdy rocket scientist. The campus hunk who had the girls screaming is now screaming louder than the girls, after his operation.

Answer 1

Those who remain the same can be easily recognized OR Those who remained the same could be easily recognized.
i think for your 2nd sentence,it'll be better to say: Those who have changed have stolen the show.
as u r mostly using the past tense,it'll be better if u use that tense everywhere,like in: There was a story behind every person who had graduated from that batch.
also, The campus chick that once had had the guys drooling has turned into a voluptuous and unattractive housewife.
The Jock who had been the king of the varsity was now a nerdy rocket scientist.
The campus hunk who had had the girls screaming was now screaming louder thatn the girls,after his operation.

I think these sentences should be written like this but am not so sure..hope these help u..

Answer 2

Here is my advice...

Those who have remained the same can be easily recognized. Those who have changed have stolen the show. The wineglasses glimmered more than the chandeliers on the ceiling. Hundreds of alumni were there to reunite with friends, while others came to make their enemies jealous. There is a story behind every person who has graduated from that batch. Typical high school stories about different social cliques have brought back some bittersweet memories. The majority has evolved. The campus chick that once had the guys drooling turned into a voluptuous and unattractive house wife. The Jock who was the king of the varsity team is now a nerdy rocket scientist. The campus hunk who once had the girls screaming is now screaming louder than the girls, after his operation.

Answer 3

Yes.
You should describe the wineglass as 'shimmering more than the chandeliers'.
In the next sentence you should use the word 'whilst', instead of 'while'.
You should say 'the majority have evolved', not 'has evolved'.
The sentence about the chick should be 'The campus chick that once had the guys drooling has turned...'
I would also recommend that you turn this into more than one paragraph.

Answer 4

wellllll . wat hav u written ?