Divorce
Caught in the whirlwind
Nothing could have prepared me for this
Back and forth yet never forward
Tired but restless
Bored yet amused
My mind plays the scattered images
Bittersweet
Painful memories
New experiences
You are one mystery
I will surely never solve
2007-03-23 20:47:41 · 15 answers · asked by Cindy 1 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
You have a refreshingly new style of writing, extremely simple, yet to the point, hitting the heart hard. Most poetry is intertwined with eloquoent words, yet yours uses more powerful verbs and nouns instead of building up weaker ones with delicate adjectives and adverbs. It is new, interesting and very true. Bravo, refine your talent, and you could consider poetry as your career.
2007-03-23 22:20:25 · answer #1 · answered by sahire 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Not bad.
The exact thoughts-are listed down
Sometimes a little too straight.
Why don’t you play with poetic license
Instead of your sentence case.
The below two line are too much of grammatically correct/full writing sentence ( if you understand what I’m saying).
Nothing could have prepared me for this
My mind plays the scattered images.
I’m not criticizing your writing skills. Do keep writing poems. Different people enjoy different types.
2007-03-24 04:07:59 · answer #2 · answered by ruwii 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Simple, but very moving, and it hit very close to home because my husband wanted one a while back (we are in marriage counseling).
The only thing I suggest is adding punctuation where needed, such as comas and periods. Other than that, you have an amazing talent. Good job.
2007-03-24 03:56:37 · answer #3 · answered by cougarmint 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
From your poem, I feel anger, remorse, and disappointment.
It sounds like she cheated on you then blamed you for the
whole thing. You filed for divorce but really didn't want to.
Yeah, it's a good poem--very strong, but good.
2007-03-24 04:01:19 · answer #4 · answered by SlownEasy 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It is a inspiring poem to those people that belong in that criteria: divorced, seperated, and wot not
Awesome poem
2007-03-24 03:52:12 · answer #5 · answered by ☼Scientific Athletic♫ 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Yes i do! i could appreciate anyone who expresses there creativity! keep up the good stuff! ONEMIND
2007-03-24 03:56:40 · answer #6 · answered by ONEMIND 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
hmmmm kind of plain but ok i guess if your new to the game put out more plz.gl
2007-03-24 03:57:28 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Sounds cool...
2007-03-24 03:55:41 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Not bad. Go to my blog and read mine...
2007-03-24 05:27:19 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
i like that i sometimes feel like that... but i'm not divorce just life experiences i've encountered...
2007-03-24 03:56:48 · answer #10 · answered by lala15 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋