Tomorrow will bring dark light
And with it I will dance
Tasting black on lips
And touching white with hands
Me and you dance for a while
And I will never let go
Holding your heart in my hand
We're a black and white picture show
We'll dance until the sun wakes up
Then we'll go and hide
Though I'm scared You're still there
And I know you're on my side
But one day we dance until we burn
And we can not run
Our bodies lay, scarred and burnt
Below the mourning sun
Fire, flame, sun, pain
Forever will be
Together in life, together in death
Just like you and me
2007-03-23 12:38:14 · 9 answers · asked by guitargirlll 1 in Society & Culture ➔ Other - Society & Culture
Yeah, not bad, but PLEASE
"You and I" not "Me and you"
2007-03-23 12:41:43 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
its good but i think with the tallent you already have it can be better keep working on it and send it into the modesto be if you are in the Modesto area the will give you reviews
2007-03-23 12:43:07 · answer #2 · answered by KODA 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Is that a poem.... It's really good.
I'm 15 and wright poems.
GO to www.poetry.com and enter to try to win cash prize.
They are publishing my poem.
I love your poem.
2007-03-24 04:44:57 · answer #3 · answered by ladiesman27 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Pretty darn beautiful. Poetry, is as always, subjective.
2007-03-23 12:41:53 · answer #4 · answered by OP 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
not to bad not to good its the thought that counts
2007-03-23 12:44:05 · answer #5 · answered by bigctman 1 · 0⤊ 1⤋
thats so sweet ^-^ but sad at the same time
2007-03-23 12:45:37 · answer #6 · answered by Zu-Zu 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
yeah it's kinda gruesome...
2007-03-23 13:09:37 · answer #7 · answered by Randy D 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
did you wright that? its very good and passionate.
2007-03-23 12:42:49 · answer #8 · answered by Tina 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i love it
2007-03-23 12:41:55 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋