What do you think of this poem?
It's a dream I just remembered and wrote down a second ago...
In my dreams darkness is light
In this coma state, my hearts wings take flight
I no longer fear the darkness of the night
For, In my dreams, all of the world is right
Epiffony consumes me
There shines the room, illuminous white
What does this dream mean?
I ponder with all of my might
so what do ya think
2007-03-23 10:33:16 · 12 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Philosophy
I think you spelled epiphany wrong, the rhyme seems forced the third and fourth lines, is completely lost in the next part and taken up again toward the end. This should be more consistent if you're setting it up this way. I like the idea that you're trying to convey, but I think it could be worded in a more aesthetic way.
2007-03-23 10:41:50 · answer #1 · answered by gilgamesh 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think that it is good, but it needs work. It is clearly not finished and you could use a better play on words, or a different method of rhyming. Do you know what assonence is? It is when the vowels and sylibals in words rhyme, but they don't rhyme perfectly. You should try it, because the words you are using to rhyme are very common.
2007-03-23 17:45:26 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
It means Fear not, dear, no matter in which reality you are in. In a dream you know exactly how it feels to be fearless, and how easy and joyful your life there are. So there is an aim to reach. . Just distinguish a difference of being fearless and being brave, then choose one. The Poem is great message...to you.
2007-03-23 17:46:49 · answer #3 · answered by Oleg B 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
You dreamed this? This must mean something...or you have a very high IQ. The poem is very good. Was this really from a dream?! Wow!
2007-03-23 17:42:30 · answer #4 · answered by M-Shizzle 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think this is pretty damn good! Personally I'm poetically challenged so I can totally appreciate your talent and and for all these people who are giving you bad reviews need to either shut up or show some credibility.
2007-03-23 17:56:00 · answer #5 · answered by Leyla 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It seams that your dream suggests that you come to the realization that the world is really wrong and is equated with, as you say, darkness.
2007-03-23 17:42:19 · answer #6 · answered by Golfer MS 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I can't QUITE get the rhyme RIGHT in my head TONIGHT because your poem is too LIGHT for my SIGHT.
Sorry, too much "ite".
2007-03-23 17:48:56 · answer #7 · answered by Joe 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
There's brighter days ahead.
2007-03-23 17:53:29 · answer #8 · answered by dwforce 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think it's good, it rhymes. Great :D.
2007-03-23 17:38:32 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
"Epiffony" is used wrong and is mis-spelled.
2007-03-23 17:40:21 · answer #10 · answered by Sophist 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋