Life's Like That
Cold and grey,
your hair blown astray.
Flustered lost,a windswept sunhat.
It may be confusing, but life's like that.
Nervous with jitters,
heart's butterflies flitter.
perhaps your shy, oh what a drat.
Left in the shadows, life's like that.
Crazy with worry, feeling insane,
riding around, on an non-stopping train.
Not sure of where you're going,or even where you're at,
spun like a spinner, life's like that.
Not feeling well, full of regret.
your feelings are obvious, by your brow full of sweat,
full of remorse, you feel small as a gnat.
It's merely human nature, because life's like that.
Now you're happy and elated,
aren't you glad that you waited?
A tire lacking air, my poem's gone flat.
So here's the happy ending,
because life's sometimes like that.
2007-03-23 09:41:27 · 10 answers · asked by Anonymous in Education & Reference ➔ Words & Wordplay
that is a great poem
2007-03-23 10:49:47 · answer #1 · answered by chowda99@sbcglobal.net 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very nice... good imagery and I also like the fact that the two rhyming lines at the start of each stanza (like cold and grey, your hair blown astray) are not exactly the same number of syllables.
This makes the poem seem less calculated and more inspired.
Good work.
2007-03-23 09:51:12 · answer #2 · answered by Wolverine 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Its real funny. I liked it. I think you are not so happy with life but still are still enjoying it for you have learned to live it the way it is. After all life's like that.
2007-03-23 09:46:23 · answer #3 · answered by Lovepreet K 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
its a good one. really life is like that. there are times when someone is satisfied with what he has and at others there is disagreement to his statement.sometimes one feels that whatever he is doing is useless and is insane and at others the work might prove him to be a genius.
2007-03-23 18:57:31 · answer #4 · answered by inderpreet k 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i like it a lot, especially the last stanza
my suggestion:
in the 2nd stanza, 2nd line
i think u should change "heart's butterflies flitter" to "butterflies' hearts flitter"
2007-03-23 09:51:36 · answer #5 · answered by randi.duh 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Not trying to get the 10points, I genuinely like it!
2007-03-23 09:48:39 · answer #6 · answered by Just me 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think your poem is awsome it's really cool love it the way it is.
2007-03-23 09:50:46 · answer #7 · answered by simey e 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Not so hot. Sorry just being honest.
2007-03-23 09:55:09 · answer #8 · answered by Michelle118 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
wow thats really good
you could be a philosopher
2007-03-23 09:46:24 · answer #9 · answered by spongebob 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I really like it
2007-03-23 09:55:39 · answer #10 · answered by six_foot_2_midget 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋