Sandwich
my belly is waiting
on bended gut
my nostrils lie and promise
heaven but
you
are just a sandwich, right?
Before first bite you offer salvation
but I know your tricks
you lousy
sandwich
2007-03-23 06:16:32 · 11 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
Poetic Justice....
Funny as heck....
I hope that was the best sandwich you ever tasted.....
2007-03-23 06:24:49 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 2⤊ 0⤋
Eh...7/10
It's good, but it lacks something important, reason.
It's just a sandwich...xD
I do like the line "Before first bite you offer salvation".
Yet, I believe that anyone who wrote this could truly do much better.
It's an amusing poem, and I'm not trying to discourage you from getting it published, but try to make one a bit more emotional...^_^
2007-03-23 06:39:47 · answer #2 · answered by sirkoopa 2 · 1⤊ 1⤋
I liked it too, and am wondering if you happened to save any for me because I am starving!!
What other food do you right poetry about??
2007-03-23 07:15:19 · answer #3 · answered by Mark F 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
It has a little humor and is fairly creative. I kind of like it!
2007-03-23 06:49:19 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 2⤊ 1⤋
I like it. Very unique.
2007-03-23 07:48:50 · answer #5 · answered by anonymous 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
That was great! You should write one to your napkin! Or your plate, or your salad! ;D
2007-03-23 06:28:49 · answer #6 · answered by Evevumeimei 3 · 1⤊ 1⤋
clever and cute good job
2007-03-23 06:26:10 · answer #7 · answered by momma 1 · 0⤊ 1⤋
you should think about getting that published.
2007-03-23 06:23:07 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 1⤋
Haha i love it :]
2007-03-23 06:20:41 · answer #9 · answered by PAIGII 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
that was awesome. I love it!
2007-03-23 06:25:31 · answer #10 · answered by Get a life 3 · 1⤊ 1⤋