Analyze this poem?

Question

This is Change

I want to see the heart
Of the world

I want to hear the sound
Of no regrets

I want to smell the awakening
Aroma of sacrifice

I want to taste the sky
And the night-stroked air

I want to feel what it's like
To live

Answer 1

The following was written before I found out that this is indeed your work:

I take it that you need assistance in analyzing this poem rather than it being your work.

The focus here would be on the how one sense (touch, taste, sight, smell, hearing) is being used where another might be more appropriate. This is called synesthesia. It works very well in that it forces the reader to try to imagine what "no regrets" will sound like, what "the sky / And the night-stroked air" will taste like, etc. In a very, very loose way it is similar to the Zen method (and not a joke) of imagining the sound of one hand clapping... the answer isn't some play on words, or snapping the fingers, or slapping your leg, etc. as it's supposed to help you clear your mind and revel in the paradox.

Another poetic device being used is anaphora, the repetition of "I want to".

You could also probably get something by analyzing the meter.

I feel this poem is about experience (the gaining of). It's also about reaching out and searching for some non-tactile bits of life. Couple the poem with the title, and there is the sense of some life altering moment.

Please, if this isn't your work, let us know who the author is. Thank you.
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Ah... I just read through some of your other work and this one by far is your best piece. Typically, using "I" excludes the reader but your poem really makes the reader sublimate him/herself with the synesthesia. The final stanza also makes me think that the previous stanzas describe what it is "To live".

Again, very good work.

Answer 2

awful. it's repetitive in a bad way. there's no unity. It's better as 5 different poems with no relation to eachother but "I want to". The language is either schizophrenic or just lazy.

see the heart (metaphor)
hear the sound (literal)
smell the awakening (?)
taste the sky (literal)
feel what it's like (literal)

You may have a lot of dreams and emotions, but to effectively communicate them, you need to work harder. Any friend will say it is good because they know you. But a stranger would not be able to engage with the text alone.

Answer 3

Sounds okay--but u need to rhyme more
I want to taste the sky
And hear the winds luliby
As the Sun sets low
I see the oceans glow
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Answer 4

sounds pertty good!
sounds like u need to get out more huh!?