Hey guys, what do you think of this song I wrote? Please be honest, and constructive criticism is welcome!
God Please Help Me
I say sorry to you
And I actually am
But only for the things
Nobody could understand
I can’t say I Love You to the people that beat me
I try not to believe those are the same hands that feed me
All I really want is love to keep me
And when you’re downstairs having fun
Bruises turn black and so does my heart
What should I do when everything falls apart?
You have no idea about the fear I feel
When I see you charging towards me with fists of steal
The bruises will fade, but my memory will never heal
They say I have control over my life
But how can I change that man and his wife?
I try to forget the day with the knife
2007-03-22 12:50:59 · 7 answers · asked by Argiiii. 5 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
*Chorus*
God please help me
I’m left here all alone
Who could I call on the phone?
I have a house, not a home
I’m heading towards destination unknown
God please to something about them
God please help me
I’m left all alone
School is Hell, but this is worse
Honestly I have no remorse
Except for the one about being born
There’s only pain and continuous mourn
Of the expected heart attacks of my dreams
Can someone tell me what happy means?
There’s an equalized amount of scars
On the outside, but the inside it’s just going to deep and too far
I’m tired of making up excuses for these purple marks.
These hollow lies are getting me cold and soul dark.
Hold my hands someone and tell me it’ll be alright.
I can’t stand another violent fight.
I can’t sleep because I’m bleeding and crying tonight.
*Chorus* x1
2007-03-22 12:52:11 · update #1
I see the burning anger in your eyes
The strings around my cage are knotted in tangly ties
While you’re hitting me my hope for escape dies
If I had the courage to raise my fist to your face
And this just stopped, I’d be smiling through my days
If you even ever decided to apologize
I’m not sure I could forgive all your lies
But maybe the pain would go away, and the happiness could rise
**** who am I playing with?
Some things will never change.
Gotta go, here they come again
*Chorus* x3
2007-03-22 12:53:02 · update #2
You sound hugely telented. Amazingly so. I only hope that the background to your lyrics isn't literal.
2007-03-22 12:57:50 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Nice
2007-03-22 12:54:47 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like your song and the lyrics Good job!
2007-03-22 13:02:24 · answer #3 · answered by ~~~~~~******* 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Wow!!! Tht was amazing! Your gifted! try selling it or whatever those people do that get famous people to sing it. I really Liked it.
2007-03-22 12:55:57 · answer #4 · answered by A Randome Person 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
how does it go??? it is easier to read lyrics with knowing how the music goes. other than that, great lyrics!
2007-03-22 12:55:16 · answer #5 · answered by <3 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think it's amazing and I think you have great talent. It truly touched me after reading it.
2007-03-22 12:53:56 · answer #6 · answered by Don't Give Up On Me 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think it's ok. Could be a bit better.
2007-03-22 12:54:19 · answer #7 · answered by thinkGREEN 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋